The university has provided student who are going to enter university with two summer vocation grograms. Which one do you think is better for students?
1) take some college courses in advance. e.g. some courses that are related to students' major.
2) visit some history museums or historical relics.
There are some moot points about summer vacation which a high school gives to students during the summer the question of which option is most beneficial for students has aroused as a subject of controversy among academic authorities everyone has their own zeitgeist when it comes to my point I strongly subscribe to the viewpoint that it would be most beneficial for students to attend class each day for completing a university level course on subject that they are considering as their major field of study at university. I have some reasons two of which will be explicated hereunder.
The first reason worth discussing is that students in this age have not a fixed horizon about their major field of study which they want to choose at a university. Consequently this kind of classes show clearly the negative and the positive aspects of the field and clarify whether students will interest to this field or not as a case of the point I vividly remember when I was a student for summer vacation my school provided an additional class for us to introduce major field which we could choose at the university before that class I intended to choose mechanical engineering field but after that I found out that this field was not fit with my characteristic and I admonished to select civil engineering field this class was very lucrative for me and changed my horizon about my major my personal experience competently corroborates to the point that additional classes in summer are very beneficial for student to know the pros and cons of each field which they can select for their future.
By the same token, another paramount reason to be mentioned is that these kinds of classes lead to student communication with other students and intercourse about each field which they will want to choose in the future. This debate about the major field of study ameliorates their experience and knowledge about those fields. My own experience demonstrates this reality, in that class which our school provided for our summer holidays, I met a person who was very talented he perused very much about civil engineering field and knew everything’s about this field. He consulted me about that course hence my notion about civil engineering altered dramatically. My personal examples shed some light to the point that this kind of classes are very beneficial for the student because they can meet many new students who are full of knowledge about each field.
To wrap it up according to the aforementioned reasons high school students should use in the best way from their summer holiday the best way is that they join to the additional classes which not only increase their knowledge about every field they can select but also lead to meet a new student who can help them to choose the best.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 164, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Consequently,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, so, kind of, by the same token
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 26.0 11.0286738351 236% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2313.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 475.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86947368421 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67293814705 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.412631578947 0.524837075471 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.9 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 47.0 20.1344086022 233% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 225.173710721 48.9658058833 460% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 231.3 100.406767564 230% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 47.5 20.6045352989 231% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 7.3 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227254796155 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112007961311 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062583088575 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167832155061 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.062782604132 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 25.3 11.7677419355 215% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 32.23 58.1214874552 55% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.4 10.1575268817 201% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 30.0 10.002688172 300% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 20.8 10.0537634409 207% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 21.0 10.247311828 205% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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