What famous place would you like to visit? Use details and reasons to support your response.

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What famous place would you like to visit? Use details and reasons to support your response.

I would choose Yellowstone national park, for my loving to the true beauty of the nature coupled with activities that the park suggests.

To begin with, I have always been fascinated by the power of the nature that can be shown in volcanic activity or just in the greatness of mountains; and Yellowstone is one of the best places in the world, where I can get my interests. I feel this way, for Yellowstone national park present real unique nature, that I have heard from others. For instance, there are geysers, cliffs, waterfalls, canyons, and hot springs, that I have never seen, yet strongly would have. The incredible geological diversity is not the only reason, why I select this place. The second cause is flora and fauna of the park. It attracts me because in my region almost all the wild animals were killed plenty years before my born. Thus, seeing animals in my country is mainly possible in zoos, while seeing nature in a flash is more valuable for me. Of course, there are some national parks in my country, but they leave much to be desired. For instance, it is not easy to attend them if you are not scientists. At the same time, Yellowstone provides an opportunity to watch numerous species in their natural habitat, that almost unachievable in my country.

What is more, besides the views that we can see in the national park, it also offers a lot of additional activities that are interesting to me. By that I mean, an opportunity to know more about wildlife or natural history that coupled with hiking, rafting, fishing tours. It is well known that Yellowstone is located in the active geological zone, that allows to study it and show it to touristic. Since I like this field of science, the trip to this national park provides me with an insight into it. Furthermore, in Yellowstone, we can combine learning of new information with practicing sports. Rafting and hiking are examples of activities that contain both adrenaline and possibility to get new knowledge about the earth arrangement. This is so we are able to explore the environment through the stops to the rest.

To summarize, my selection of Yellowstone is explained by combining of opportunities that the national park offers. They are a glimpse of the unique wild nature and animals in their natural habitat. Besides that, the park provides a countless number of possibilities for active time spending that attracts me as well.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...re geysers, cliffs, waterfalls, canyons, and hot springs, that I have never seen,...
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Suggestion: studying
...the active geological zone, that allows to study it and show it to touristic. Since I li...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, if, second, so, thus, well, while, for instance, i feel, i mean, of course, to begin with, what is more

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2007.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82451923077 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72348767647 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528846153846 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 636.3 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.989426693 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5714285714 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8095238095 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47619047619 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0470530335008 0.236089414692 20% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0155540209607 0.076458572812 20% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0261580510294 0.0737576698707 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0275681827505 0.150856017488 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0182750917637 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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