What recent news story has affected you the most? In what ways has it affected you?
News not only informs people but it can also be an inspiration for people in their lives. Recently, I watch an extraordinary boy in the news who can play the piano and sing very beautifully while he is blind and suffers from autism. Getting to know him and his family are fabulous things that occurred in my life.
First of all, when I realized that there is a person in the world who is blind but plays piano impressively, I have been shocked. As a musician, I understand how hard it can be to play a song accurately. One of the most important parts of learning to play the piano is watching its keys carefully, but when somebody cannot looking at keys, it seems impossible to play even a simple song. Cody Lee, the boy who gets this miracle done, is an excellent iconic person as the symbol of hardworking.
Moreover, Cody Lee shows me that talking is not the only way to shows my feeling. Although he cannot talk properly due to his autism problem, he expresses his feeling by singing. For example, when he is sad, he plays a sad song; therefore, everybody around him understands that he needs more companionship. This method gives me the courage to use my ability to connect with people more efficiently.
The last reason for my inspiration is Cody’s family. They stayed together when they had informed that Cody is blind and is an autistic person. I understand that while being under pressure because of any of my family members’ problems, I can handle all these problems by coöperation and loving each other. No matter what it comes to me, so long as my family stays united, I can overcome any obstacle.
All in all, Cody Lee teaches me not afraid of difficulties in my life. As long as I do my best to reach my goals, I can overcome my problems to attain my dreams. His family teaches me how to love my family no matter what it costs. Cody Lee definitely is a tremendous idol in my life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 202, Rule ID: OF_ANY_OF[1]
Message: Consider simply using 'of' instead.
Suggestion: of
...that while being under pressure because of any of my family members' problems, I can...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1569.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.50862068966 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66770070122 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534482758621 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.6134971193 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.5789473684 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3157894737 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47368421053 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.040155315352 0.236089414692 17% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0137759358956 0.076458572812 18% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0228653262019 0.0737576698707 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.023822930021 0.150856017488 16% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0089881224163 0.0645574589148 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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