What will your friend like and not like when visiting your hometown? Use examples and reasons to develop your argument.
When my friend was visited my home last year, he had a mixed opinion about my negative place. Few things he liked it very much. For example, exotic costumes and religious believe. In contrast, he don’t like few things like pollution and traffic. Here I am going to explain both pro and con’s of my friend visit.
First of all, the main assert of my home town Hyderabad, India is traditional dressing which he liked it because in my home town, girls wear a variety of saries. Since, my friend is from Australia, it is really an eye opening for him. For example, when he was first step into my home, he was really thrilled by seeing my mother’s dressing style because he wear saree which is made up of more than thousand colored fabric and he said that he never seen such a multi colored dress. In addition to that, he was really mesmerized when my grad mothers though us about the religious believers and its origin. He said, he learned a lot from her. Those are the two unforgettable events happened when he visited my place.
In contrast, my friend really unhappy with two main things when he visited my place; one is traffic and second is pollution. He was really struggled to adjust. India is a country having a huge population almost second largest country in the world. So, there is no surprise for me to having a huge traffic and people break the traffic rules very often but, my friend is from a place where having less traffic and people are strictly follow the traffic rules. Hence, he feels like it was a huge traffic. In addition, he don’t like the pollution because my house is almost nest to the main road so there has been lot of pollution and my hose almost coved with a lots of smoke because of motor vehicle. He don’t like that, in fact, he become a sick for first two days because of pollution.
As I illustrated, when my friend visiting my place he had a mixed opinion about my town. He experienced some eye opening events and learned a lot of religious believes. On the other hand, he also faced a lot of challenges with pollution and traffic. So I suggest people, whenever we visiting new place, we should have to prepare for all challenges.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 361, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wears'.
Suggestion: wears
...mother's dressing style because he wear saree which is made up of more than tho...
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Line 2, column 402, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a thousand'.
Suggestion: a thousand
...ear saree which is made up of more than thousand colored fabric and he said that he neve...
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Line 3, column 486, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'huge traffic'.
Suggestion: huge traffic
...ffic rules. Hence, he feels like it was a huge traffic. In addition, he don't like the po...
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Line 3, column 575, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'nested'.
Suggestion: nested
...he pollution because my house is almost nest to the main road so there has been lot ...
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Line 3, column 662, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a lot' or simply 'lots'?
Suggestion: a lot; lots
...pollution and my hose almost coved with a lots of smoke because of motor vehicle. He d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, really, second, so, for example, in addition, in contrast, in fact, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1797.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53787878788 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46740174481 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479797979798 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.3358418472 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.6818181818 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63636363636 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.090217853964 0.236089414692 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0413428194997 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0371387244347 0.0737576698707 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0779465683896 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0379530765094 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.88 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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