When a new technological device becomes available some people buy it right away others wait until many have adopted it Which view do you agree with Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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When a new technological device becomes available, some people buy it right away; others wait until many have adopted it. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Several technological devices are released each year. All manufacturing companies advertise their products with great offers so people are tempted to buy them. Hence, there have been debates about whether it is better to buy a product right after it was released, or wait a while until many have bought it. I believe it is rational to wait a while to buy a new product. I will explain my reasons in the following essay.
First, the cost of each device is a deciding factor for many citizens. Based on statistics many new products experience a fall in prices after some period of their release either due to competition with other companies or products being easier to manufacture. Therefore, it would be wise to wait a while for the prices to reach an acceptable range before attempting to buy them. For example, when mobile phones were first released only the wealthy could afford to buy them but after a year or two passed due to numerous brands manufacturing the device and advance in technology leading to easier production the prices fell exponentially. Hence, many middle class families could afford the device as well. based on this notion it is cost effective to wait for a period of time to buy a device.
Second, the devices usability is of utmost importance. Suppose we buy a device and after some time find out these products couldn't offer the capablities we expected of them, which leads us to think we have wasted our money. For example, air pods have were very popular when they got released every body bought and used them but after a while their lost their novelty and their issues came to light. Recently a friend of mine that used air pods told me that wired earphones were better. She elaborated on the subject by stating that they last longer and transmit voice with less noise, which is why she had to buy wired earphones after six months of using bluetooth earphone. Therefore, by waiting we can figure out if the products are usable for us or if they are not gonna help us for long.
In conclusion, I believe that by waiting for a technological device to get adopted rather than buying it immediatly the prices will be lessened and we will figure out if the product will be usable or not.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 705, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Based
...milies could afford the device as well. based on this notion it is cost effective to ...
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Line 2, column 761, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...tion it is cost effective to wait for a period of time to buy a device. Second, the devices u...
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Line 3, column 13, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'devices'' or 'device's'?
Suggestion: devices'; device's
...d of time to buy a device. Second, the devices usability is of utmost importance. Supp...
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Line 3, column 123, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...after some time find out these products couldnt offer the capablities we expected of th...
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Line 3, column 251, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...d our money. For example, air pods have were very popular when they got released eve...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1824.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65306122449 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51655803593 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525510204082 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.7102000908 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.333333333 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7777777778 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72222222222 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217313001046 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0720449363213 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0332376368027 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139758692682 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0481751667321 0.0645574589148 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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