When people succeed, it is entirely because of hard work. Luck has nothing to
do with their success
It is crystal clear that people having the characteristics of hard work not only can become successful in their private lives but also can become useful for their society. From my point of view, attainig success is not easy and it requires a great deal of effort, meaning that it is not achivable by chance or random. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
From a social perspective, one should apply and acquire essential abilities and skills to achieve success at the later stages of own life. To put it in other words, today, people should obtain fundamental capabilities to work with modern devices such as computer and smart phone. Therefore, it is crucial to have up to date information in order to keep in pace with technology. These are not achiveble unless one spend time on learning how to work with these new modern devices. Moreover, in today's world having the chance for success is meaningless and success will be reachable on the bases of working a lot. For the purpose of illustration, consider developed countries, in the past during their revolution, people of developed countries work about 12 hours in a day to help their country to pass the devastating situations. Therefore, we can see the result of their acesstors' effort in developed country such as England and Germany. THis is where the necessity to work hard emerges.
On the economic side, not only should individuals work hard to start business, but they should make smart decisions to make money as well. On the other hand, people should concentrate on their knowledge and information, which can provide a context for their economic developments in the course of time. This is because of the fact that information and data analysis become the backbone of progress in every field of marketing and business. Therefore, taking a chance not only play nothing in the growth of one company and society but also will cause a damage to newborn copany or industry. What brings social and economic growth and prosperity is hard working, which is clearly evidence in all aspects of human life.
To sum up, I hold the view that people should depend on their effort rather taht their chance. This is because the cornerstones of this world is hard work.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 312, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...lopments in the course of time. This is because of the fact that information and data analysis become th...
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Line 9, column 551, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'damage'.
Suggestion: damage
...company and society but also will cause a damage to newborn copany or industry. What bri...
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Line 9, column 679, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'evidenced'.
Suggestion: evidenced
...erity is hard working, which is clearly evidence in all aspects of human life. To s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, such as, in other words, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1865.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88219895288 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6578984079 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523560209424 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9910704793 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.611111111 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2222222222 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280033103901 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0817678495313 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0512952540721 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178089874015 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0361111241107 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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