Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities?
The seek for dangerous sports and activities have been growing with the years. Lots of people are everyday getting more interested in radical sports, that's the reason why tourism in some countries that have those activities and sports - as paragliding, diving in deep waters, bunge jump and so on - has increased in the past years. But the question is, why does people relate to radical sports?
Routine can be exhausting; to wake up, go to work, come back home and go to sleep to start the entire cicle all over again, can eventually make yourself bored, and also make you realize that you have no purpose in life or that you are just living to survive and not doing anything that you actually like. We want to make our life count, put a meaning to it, after all, we live just once. In my opinion people jump from high bridges, or from an airplance to make the check in a box of things I have never done. To make life a little more exciting!
Besides that, I think everyday more people want to feel alive. And that is what those kind of sports do to yourself. You get addicted to the adrenaline, you chalenge yourself, and by that, you feel that you can achieve every goal you once made or porsue any dream you once had, and that makes you feel alive.
In conclusion, I think everybody is just trying to survive the world and giviging some meaning to their lifes by doing radical sports.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, if, so, after all, i think, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1145.0 1977.66487455 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 255.0 407.700716846 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.49019607843 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22761881296 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58431372549 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 360.9 618.680645161 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.3408364408 48.9658058833 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.5 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 5.45110844103 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296126627703 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110535616646 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594010780784 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164201998266 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0741638249848 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.06 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 86.8835125448 44% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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