Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Most people enjoy sports especially dangerous, in my own opinion dangerous sports are more admirable to the one who perform it and those who are watching it. I think this way for two reasons, which I will discuss in the following essay.
To begin with, dangerous sports are more difficult than safe sports, there is a possibility of braking our body’s parts. And being not able to do it again or paying a large amount of money for surgery.
People love to watch amazing things and freak out, However, there are many more people to attract followers but the main issue is that followers want to watch thing the get rid of boringness.
And the one who perform it can have a good income by selling his show ticket and get a pay rise from YouTube due to the large number of followers.
Secondly, those who perform dangerous sports also earn a good picture in their society and get a job easily in specific center especially in fashion, modeling and marketing, because they can influence people idea as they did before in their performance
However, their performance can get a supporters, and the earn a lot of money which they can invest in a business to earn money and stop doing dangerous sports but as I mentioned early there is a more important issue than money which is exciting, performer may not enjoy their business, they only do that for earning money.
In Conclusion, dangerous sports are attractive because performers put their selves in a deadly situation, and can get the performer a high society privilege
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Have you experienced the…
Have you experienced the fear of bungee jumping? Have you ever enjoyed the excitement of car racing? Nowadays, more and more people are attracted to such dangerous activities, especially young people. Wondering why? After thinking about the lifestyle of those people, the reason goes as follows.
While the world is becoming more and more competitive, the tasks on each person's shoulders become havier and havier. people's everyday activities are very intense. The best way to relax and get relieved is to go in for dangerous activities, because while you are doing something dangerous, you have to concentrate on it, and you cannot think about anything else. Hense you relieved all the unhappiness and the troubles you had in the daily work.
In addition, to take risks and try out new things is one of the human being's basic instincts. People always like to do something new, especially when something in popular as well. According to some statistics, the dangerous activities are becoming extremely popular among young people. If you do not try some dangerous activities, people will think that you are a coward and you are afraid of doing it. So it is reasonable enough for them to do dangerous sports to show their braveness.
However, I do not like dangerous activities and I believe the phenomenon that people are attracted to dangerous activities is just a whim, After realizing countless disadvantages of them, people will reconsider about them. Some safer activities to help to get relieved will be developed afterwards.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a supporter' or simply 'supporters'?
Suggestion: a supporter; supporters
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, i think, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 52.1666666667 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1259.0 1977.66487455 64% => OK
No of words: 266.0 407.700716846 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73308270677 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54072210427 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537593984962 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 393.3 618.680645161 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.6003584229 39% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 151.005587645 48.9658058833 308% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 157.375 100.406767564 157% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.25 20.6045352989 161% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 5.45110844103 202% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.53405017921 154% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161750497349 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0725408026216 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04282764953 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0830985971964 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396933414655 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 11.7677419355 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.75 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 86.8835125448 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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