You have decided to give several hours of your time each month to improve the community where you live. What is one thing you will do to improve your community? Why?
Community is one of the most significant part of our lives, because it implies interacting with people and living in harmony. That's why every individual should contribute one way or another to improve it. As far as I am concerned, I would contribute by underlining the importance of natural environment. This is due the fact that nature is vital for our health and for the future of our children. I will explain my statement in the following essay.
First of all, a clean atmosphere is essential for people's health, being the root of our well-being. The more green spaces we have, the healthier we are. Therefore, I would start a program that involves the whole neighborhood. The main purpose of it is to plant as much trees as possible, to arrange green spaces and to arouse awareness about the importance of natural environment. Moreover, this program would have implication on long term, because kids would learn to protect the nature, to implement what they see, perpetuating such positive actions. For example, I saw my five years old nephew folding a plastic bottle and putting it in a separate bin. When I asked him why he did that, he said he learned at kindergarten how to recycle plastic, mentioning that he wants to live in a clean world. Thus, as you can see, a small lesson can impact a generation.
Second, an unpolluted environment is important for the future of our off-springs. Unfortunately, nowadays the situation is deplorable, because human activities influence the climate. Moreover, not only health is affected, but lifestyle, crops and other sources of food are suffering to. This happens as a consequence of global warming, and one way to prevent this from happening is to enlarge the green spaces and the forests. For instance, I live in Ankara in outskirts and I have the advantage to be surrounded by forests and green landscapes. There was a strong storm last week, and the areas covered by cement were affected by serious floods, and actually some cars were floating. However, my neighborhood was not affected at all, because the water was absorbed into the land. Furthermore, the storm was less powerful here because there is less cement, and thus less abnormal meteorological events.
To summarize, one way to enhance the community I live in, is by implementing a green program. This is because planting trees is both a helpful method to have a prosperous, healthy live and because it fights against fouling the environment which is vital for our children' future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 127, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
...ting with people and living in harmony. Thats why every individual should contribute ...
Line 3, column 265, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
.... The main purpose of it is to plant as much trees as possible, to arrange green spa...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2083.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93601895735 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89115161569 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5663507109 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.8733598716 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.5652173913 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.347826087 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73913043478 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105854633146 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0280235860918 0.076458572812 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381167080574 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0695704572528 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0319438312167 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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