You have received a gift of money. The money is enough to buy either a piece of jewelry you like or tickets to a concert you want to attend. Which would you buy? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
When it comes to the issue the choice between going to concert and buying jewelry, some people believe that surely we will enjoy more of going to concert. They would like to vote for such a plan of buildings because of its advantages. However, others maintain the opposite view, and they think that attend to concert is nothing but waste of time. As far as I am concerned, the former point carries more weight. I take this position on account for the following reasons.
The first and most cited reason is that the main purpose of holding concert is to make joy in audiences. In today’s stress-rich environment, we have to work all day long, and this condition may depress us. Definitely, we require an entertainment to relive us from heavy pressures. In the live concert, people can experience an intimacy atmosphere, because all people come there for enjoy. Going to concert assists us to be away from the real world for some hours. I think that a small example can give some light on this topic. Usually people think that they can sit on the sofa and watching concert music by television. However, you can not compare the live concert with watching it on the television. Generally, people more need entertainment like concert to release them from stresses.
There is also a more subtle point we must consider. In the concert, you can meet more people and make friend. It is quite normal that there is majority range of people, and it is special privilege if you want to make friends. Your exposure to many kinds of people will not only develop your people skill, but also give you the firmer knowledge of others, both foe and friend. I think that there in no better example than myself when I was in the university, which is near the California. At that time, one of my friends worked in a famous concerts hall. On of my birthday, he gave me a ticket for a concert in thanks-giving day. I had never been there, but I was curious to experience new environment. Eventually, I went the concert and enjoyed of music, dance with others and found a beautiful girl, which is my wife now. Overall, the biggest advantage of playing game lies in the fact that helps people to associate with others.
Taking into account all of these factors, we may reach the conclusion that going to a concert obviously is a pleasant experience, and improves your social skill. Of course, as an English proverb goes “coin has two sides,” those who take the opposite view are partly reasonable that concerts ordinary are not available in smalls town, and going another city is cumbersome and time-consuming. Nonetheless, I think that its benefits outweigh dangers. Last but not least, let us hope that people pay more attention to artistic activities, and support them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 539, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'concerts'' or 'concert's'?
Suggestion: concerts'; concert's
...e, one of my friends worked in a famous concerts hall. On of my birthday, he gave me a t...
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Line 4, column 225, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
...sh proverb goes 'coin has two sides,' those who take the opposite view are p...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'nonetheless', 'so', 'i think', 'of course']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.207272727273 0.229887763892 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.154545454545 0.158761421928 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0836363636364 0.0866891130778 96% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0490909090909 0.046263068375 106% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0763636363636 0.0685040099705 111% => OK
Prepositions: 0.114545454545 0.118717715034 96% => OK
Participles: 0.0236363636364 0.0351676179071 67% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.63035914875 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0309090909091 0.0309702414327 100% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0872727272727 0.0887237588012 98% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.02 0.0209618222197 95% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0109090909091 0.0139019557991 78% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2765.0 2387.08602151 116% => OK
No of words: 481.0 408.028673835 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.74844074844 5.86048508987 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.326403326403 0.338922669872 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.245322245322 0.251872472559 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.149688149688 0.174417080927 86% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0914760914761 0.112833075102 81% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63035914875 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540540540541 0.524397521467 103% => OK
Word variations: 65.0387896369 59.2087087015 110% => OK
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6684587814 135% => OK
Sentence length: 17.1785714286 20.5533526081 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0055480846 48.84282405 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.75 120.699889404 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1785714286 20.5533526081 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.357142857143 0.644075263715 55% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 41.7107959608 45.7405998639 91% => OK
Elegance: 1.23376623377 1.45489161554 85% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329962884244 0.300154397459 110% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0829114882953 0.103427244359 80% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0725945929661 0.0752933317313 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.405958268247 0.497263757937 82% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.118637024507 0.151897553556 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105169910118 0.114077575197 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0713256457815 0.0781384742642 91% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.407626251804 0.336927656856 121% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0512873180002 0.067059652881 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233959028493 0.210909579961 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548588454715 0.0618886996521 89% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8870967742 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.91756272401 183% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 14.0 8.42114695341 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.6433691756 139% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.