Young people should try several different jobs before they take a long term career.
Careers have an important role in everyone's life, inasmuch as can bring them happy or sad life. A proper job depending on peoples' viewpoint and skills. Even though many people are the opinion that going from one job to another and changing the field of work will not be reasonable and is a kind of time-wasting; but, I, personally subscribed to this idea that it is necessary for every person who wants to find a proper long-term career, to experience several different jobs. Such experiences help them to find their interest in the realm of working and also give them many opportunities to become a skillful person and following more prestigious and decent jobs.
In first place, as far as being successful in jobs is concerned, the people need to find their interest in the first place. It stands to reason that individuals cannot be prosperous and success in their job unless they are interested to such a work. People will be able to know about their interests relating to their job through experience many different workplaces with different tasks. For instance, my sister before trying several jobs, attend to the first long-term career suggested to her. After a while she became frustrated because she didn’t like her job at all. She wishes she could experience more jobs.
Secondly, human beings' skills thrive through their experiences during their lives, especially in their youth. It is not to mention that expert person have a lot skills which help them to progress in their jobs. These days, society and enterprises look for versatile people who can afford many tasks at their job not just in their field of study or expert. For instance, my husband takes different jobs in his youth, like working in a research institute, manufacturing factory, Construction Company and so on even he studied mechanical engineering at university. He obtains proficiency in the different fields, in fact he is now a versatile person who will absorb in any job position that he wants. He is a literally successful person in his long-term job thanking to his previous experiences and following skills.
In summary, in my opinion, trying different jobs before getting a long-term job bring people a lot benefits. They can look for their interest by which they can do their best in their job and be success. I also think experiencing different jobs give many opportunities to people to improve and promote their skills with which they will be able to find a decent and lucrative job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 123, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
... or sad life. A proper job depending on peoples viewpoint and skills. Even though many ...
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Line 2, column 453, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'several'.
Suggestion: several
... proper long-term career, to experience several different jobs. Such experiences help them to fin...
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Line 2, column 494, Rule ID: HELP_TO_FIND[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help them find' instead.
Suggestion: help them find
...everal different jobs. Such experiences help them to find their interest in the realm of working ...
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Line 3, column 341, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...elating to their job through experience many different workplaces with different tasks. For in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, in fact, in summary, kind of, in my opinion, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2068.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93556085919 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71727993683 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489260143198 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.518992692 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.842105263 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0526315789 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05263157895 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286369688056 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100880849525 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0958503769365 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202231281409 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0703904943583 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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