Your friend has the opportunity to choose either one of two types of majors (fields of study), which one of the following two majors do you think is a better choice, and why?
– A major that would allow him to finish years of study and get a degree sooner (so that he would begin to work full-time quickly). Or
– A major that requires many years of study that would provide him with more employment opportunities and offers in the future.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Be sure to use your own words. Do not memorize some certain examples.
Nowadays, there is a debate among people about the time of finding job and make life. Although some people think that having job sooner is better than continuing education, other people have opposite attitude about this matter and they believe that education must be ongoing to achieve more success. In my oppinion, when you have high degree of education, you are more achievement rather than another situation. That is due to your knowledge becomes more reliable, rising your status in society , and more opportunities are available for you.
First and foremost, I believe that knowledge has an momentous role in our life and success. in other wors, when you have a good knowledge, you can improve your skills and become more succesful in your position. For example, I worked for a company that they wanted to expel some of employees because of decrease their budgets. they reject just the workers that they had low level degree.
Second, all of us are needed to have a good position and prestigue in our society; therefore, making this status requires some achivements that having a education with high degree can improve this position among people. Otherwise, people like to be popular, eventhough, they are not celeberity. For instance, people normally are attracted to work that those are hard to achieve; therefore, person that has high education become one of the important people in their environment.
Last but not least, when you are graduated with high degree, you show that have good ability and knowledge. In other side, company are required to recruit employees with high skills. to put it differently, when you have knolwdge and you are adepted, there are a huge number of positions for initiating your work. As an example, my brother gradutaed with bachelor degree from the university ten years ago, but he had not found job before he got his master degree in his major.
As outlined above, having high education is an importance; thus, continuing can help to improve in future life, eventhough, you must spend more time. That is becasue of knowledge is key factor of finding job, moreover, you can change your position in society, and finding job becomes more readily.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 495, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... reliable, rising your status in society , and more opportunities are available fo...
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Line 2, column 50, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... foremost, I believe that knowledge has an momentous role in our life and success....
^^
Line 2, column 92, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...momentous role in our life and success. in other wors, when you have a good knowle...
^^
Line 2, column 273, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the employees') or simply say ''some employees''.
Suggestion: some of the employees; some employees
...for a company that they wanted to expel some of employees because of decrease their budgets. they...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 326, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...yees because of decrease their budgets. they reject just the workers that they had l...
^^^^
Line 3, column 152, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...s requires some achivements that having a education with high degree can improve ...
^
Line 3, column 478, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... important people in their environment. Last but not least, when you are graduat...
^^^
Line 4, column 184, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: To
... to recruit employees with high skills. to put it differently, when you have knolw...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1824.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99726027397 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54761459245 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512328767123 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4247162269 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.294117647 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4705882353 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.70588235294 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0982187795761 0.236089414692 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0322436543914 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.030776789845 0.0737576698707 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0564427829589 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0283573547639 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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