Your friend wants to lose weight. what advice would you give to you friend and why?
No one can deny that obesity is one of the most significant problem nowadays. People try to exert different methods to decrease their weigh while most of them may do not have enough knowledge about basic and simple way of losing weight. The best way for controlling weight has always been a controversial topic between people especially those who have over-weighting. Personally, were I wanted to advise my friend to decrease his weight, I would definitely tell him that you should do exercise and eat healthy foods. I feel this way because doing exercise help us to consume energy in our body and decrease our weight and aslo eating healthy food helps our digestive system. To shed light on my perspective, I will elaborate on these reasons in the following paragraphs.
The first conspicuous point that my friend should consider for losing weight is concerned with the fact that physical activities is very important in our weight control. To put this in a more vivid picture, while a few of people do not like to work out or may not regulate their schedule for it, daily exercise can improve our health status and control our weight directly. Furthermore, by regular daily activity, people can consume their fats and construct muscles instead of them. However, doing exercise is hard, in addition to improve our health status, it can improve our self-confidence level. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in last year of high school, I used to study every day for Konkoor, which is iranian university entrance exam, and because of a few physical activity, I got weight so much. My father told me that you should lose weight and exercise is best way for it. Therefore, I started to go to gym and after a while, I lost ten kilograms of my weight. Had I not started exercising, I would not have been able to lose my weight. So I think physical activities is one of the most significant way for losing weight .
Another noteworthy method that can help my friend to lose his weight is eating healthy food. As a matter of fact, while fast foods are very delicious and easy to prepare, they are not healthy at all whether or not we like this disadvantage. Vegetables and fruits are one of the most important resources of vitamins that is essential for consuming energy in our body, so if we eat more of these foods, the energy will not deposite in our body in shape of fat. Nevertheless, meat and bread are also require for a good and healthy diet, but the role of vegetables should not be ignored in food digest. To be specified, comprehensive research in 2020 at The University of Tehran, my university, department of medical science, has shown that the most reason for obesity is lack of fiber which can be provided by fruits and vegetables in daily food. Consequently, when people eat less than this food and instead tend to eat fringe and fast foods, they will gain weight. So one of the way for losing weight is eating healthy foods such as vegtables. Based on the resutls of the aforementioned study, the more healthy foods people use, the less over-weighting problem they have. As a result, I recomende my friend to increase the share of vegtables and healthy food in his diet to lose weight .
To make a long story short, I am of the opinion that my friend should consider the following points to lose weight which are doing exercise every day and also eating healthy food. This is my firm belief which I recomended to my firm because of my knowledge in physical status.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, while, i feel, i think, in addition, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 78.0 43.0788530466 181% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2909.0 1977.66487455 147% => OK
No of words: 619.0 407.700716846 152% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69951534733 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.98795655647 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65596817722 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.445880452342 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 909.9 618.680645161 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2036419511 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.740740741 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9259259259 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2962962963 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162230144363 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572397169681 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683954091103 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112134285867 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0308654842509 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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