Your friends have the opportunity to choose either one of two types of majors (fields of study), which one of the following two majors do you think is a better choice, and why?
1. A major that would allow him to finish years of study and get a degree sooner (so that he would begin to work full-time quickly).
2. A major that requires many years of study that would provide him with more employment opportunities and offers in the future.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Be sure to use your own words. Do not memorize some certain examples.
Decisions, made by the young, are becoming increasingly significant especially for those choices which can even affect one’s life. Personally, I am convinced that both of two kinds of major have some advantages. I believe choosing a major that would allow him to finish years of study will be a better choice than another sort of major.
Admittedly, choosing a major that would allow him to finish his study earlier is somewhat advantageous. Most importantly, he can gain access to money earlier because he will begin to do full-time work after finishing the study earlier so that he can be independent at a relatively young age without parents’ control. Since the financial problem is the main reason that the young cannot be without their parents, he, who has been into full-time work with income, can live independently without any problem. Then he is able to enjoy his life with his very first amount of money without asking for parents’ financial aid when he is still young to be qualified to play something limits to age.
Despite this, the benefits of a major that would allow him to finish years of study can be apparently found to be more. First of all, the better opportunities provided by this sort of major will be more beneficial to the entire life of him. If he can choose this kind of major, he will find it easer to get an ideal job which may even be an optimal one to him. Then he may also get more promotions and chances to work without any barrier. In this case, he is indeed walking to the possible peak of his life. On top of that, he may also get more valuable friends in long-term study and be successful together in the future. Since most of the students who choose this kind of major are all very ambitious and have superior abilities. With the same major, my friend may study with them can even build up good friendships with them. These people are actually considered to be a vital component to his successful life. For instance, he may be asked to start a business by those intelligent students. This is an unique chance to get the victory of his life.
All in all, I think it depends on himself to choose a suitable major. For me, I will recommend him to carefully think about both the advantages of two choices before making a determining decision to his life. If he is the kind of person who does like freedom , he may choose the former one. While if he is more interested in creating a successful life, then he will be more likely to start a major which needs diligently studying but does deserve.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 992, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... by those intelligent students. This is an unique chance to get the victory of his...
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Line 7, column 259, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...the kind of person who does like freedom , he may choose the former one. While if ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, apparently, but, first, if, may, so, still, then, while, for instance, i think, kind of, sort of, first of all, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2091.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60572687225 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59927627801 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482378854626 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 666.0 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2782987531 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0454545455 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6363636364 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45454545455 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263790263703 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0981042798969 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0937111245854 0.0737576698707 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203341928029 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0920539404022 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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