n the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in electronic databases rather than on paper. It is argued that storing patients' medical records in electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping.
Reducing Costs
First, the use of electronic records can help reduce costs by saving money on storing and transferring medical records. While paper records require a significant amount of storage space, electronic medical records take up virtually no space. Moreover, by having patients' records computerized in databases, doctors can easily access the records from almost anywhere and can easily duplicate and transfer them when necessary. This costs much less than copying, faxing, or transporting paper records from one location to another.
Preventing Errors
Second, electronic medical records are crucial to reducing the chances of medical errors. Illegible handwriting, improper transcription of data, and nonstandard organization of paper records have caused errors that in some cases have had serious consequences for the patients' health. In contrast, electronic records are associated with standardization of forms and legible computer fonts and thus minimize the possibility of human error.
Aiding Research
Third, electronic medical records can greatly aid medical research by making it possible to gather large amounts of data from patient records. It is often impractical, impossible, or prohibitively expensive to manually go through thousands of patients’ paper records housed in doctors' offices. However, with the existence of electronic medical records, it would be simple to draw out the needed information from the medical databases because the databases are already formatted for data collection. Once in the electronic system, the records could be accessed from any research location.
The reading passage and lecture have conflicting opinions about whether or nor replacing paper medical records with electronic one is beneficial. The article strongly postulates that there are many upsides of using electronic medical records over documenting medical records. On the other hand, the listening adamantly delinates that the benefits of having electronic medical records are uncertain.
First and foremost, according to the author of the excerpt, computerizing medical records will lead to saving money. In other words, electronic records don't need space to store it. Also, it saves money on storing and transporting medical records. Nonetheless, the lecture offsets these points by declaring that saving cost is not likely to be significant owing to the fact that doctors who adopt electronic records still keeping their paper records as emergency or for local reasons. which means they still have to pay for storage.
On top of this, the professor further points out that using electronic records will not eliminate poor handwriting and mistakes. Furthermore, doctors are still using papers and pens. The office staff enters the information to the computer from the doctor paper. Meaning that if the doctor made a mistake on the paper, the office will make the same mistake. These claims refute the writer implication of how electronic records are essential in order to eliminate some usual medical errors.
The article lastly asserts that having a computerized database for the medical records would help to collect much information from patients. Therefore, doctors will be able to have the required information to treat patients. The speaker in lecture counters these points by insisting that medical research is subjected to strict privacy from the government. Moreover, doctors have to follow elaborated procedure and get the patient's approval to get their medical records. So patients can block their records.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 153, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ney. In other words, electronic records dont need space to store it. Also, it saves ...
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Line 3, column 485, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Which
...ords as emergency or for local reasons. which means they still have to pay for storag...
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Line 7, column 424, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'patients'' or 'patient's'?
Suggestion: patients'; patient's
...follow elaborated procedure and get the patients approval to get their medical records. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, lastly, moreover, nonetheless, so, still, therefore, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1641.0 1373.03311258 120% => OK
No of words: 299.0 270.72406181 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48829431438 5.08290768461 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67150608775 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555183946488 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 419.366225166 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.2011169765 49.2860985944 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.1666666667 110.228320801 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6111111111 21.698381199 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.44444444444 7.06452816374 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367809820881 0.272083759551 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111116155928 0.0996497079465 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0446970459215 0.0662205650399 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217308016864 0.162205337803 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0301785417833 0.0443174109184 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.3589403974 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 53.8541721854 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.2367328918 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 63.6247240618 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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