TOEFL Official Guide Test2 Writing task 1
The lecture states that we must question the benifits of professors appearing on television.
The passage states that this may benefit the professor as their reputation as an authority in the field would increase.This according to the lecture may not be true. The professors may be labelled by fellow scholars as 'not serious', emphasizing more on entertaining rather than educating. This would affect their professional career as they might not be invited to conferences and could also suffer from reduced funding as a result of their labelling.
The passage states that universities would benefit from increased reputation as a result of public being aware of their 'knowledgable faculty' . There would be more students applying and more funding.The lecture counters this misbelief by stating that the time spent by the professor for rehearsing, presenting, getting TV ready is valuable research time lost. This lost time would definitely affect the university and the students adversely, thus causing a feeling of aversion in motivated candidates.
Finally, the lecture also counters the point that the public would benefit from the 'knowledge and expertise of the learned professor' as stated in the passage. It states that most information provided on TV is not serious or of depth and could as well be gathered and presented by a news reporter with a little research. This is obvious as no one would want deep insights and conclusions while watching a television show just after dinner
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 120, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...n authority in the field would increase.This according to the lecture may not be tru...
^^^^
Line 3, column 232, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...elled by fellow scholars as not serious, emphasizing more on entertaining rather ...
^^
Line 5, column 141, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...eing aware of their knowledgable faculty . There would be more students applying ...
^^
Line 5, column 181, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... . There would be more students applying and more funding.The lecture counters th...
^^
Line 5, column 200, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...ore students applying and more funding.The lecture counters this misbelief by stat...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, if, may, so, thus, well, while, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 5.04856512141 277% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1256.0 1373.03311258 91% => OK
No of words: 238.0 270.72406181 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27731092437 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92775363542 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87752361491 2.5805825403 112% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 145.348785872 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558823529412 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 382.5 419.366225166 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.9507433403 49.2860985944 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.6 110.228320801 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8 21.698381199 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 7.06452816374 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.3589403974 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 53.8541721854 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.2367328918 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.42419426049 109% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 63.6247240618 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.7273730684 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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