TPO 24 Integrated TOEFL Writing(R)
The reading and lecture are both about whether 70 million old animal fossils of T Rex provide information of studying animal tissues or not. The author believes that the fossils of the T Rex gives essential information about the tissue of the animal whereas the lecturer opposes the idea by saying that the facts the author mentions as bases of his belief may be skeptical.
Firstly the author believes that the small branching channels inside the fossilized leg bone presents hollos in the bones where blood vessels were once located. The remarkable finding for the author was the presence of soft, flexible organic substance inside the channelswhich may correspond to the actual blood vessels of T Rex. But the lecturer opposes that the hollowness may have been created by bacteria and the soft and flexible organic substance may not represent blood vessels rather the substance may represent the residue of bacteria after leaving the animal.
Secondly, the author suggests that, the presence of spheres in various parts of the inner bone may correspond to the remains of blood cells. The article notes that the spheres had iron-a material which is crucial to red blood cells for transporting oxygen to tissues. Additionally the author contends that the size of the red dark centre of the sphere was of the red blood cells. The lecturer opposes the author's idea by saying that similar spheres were also found on other animals and those animals dod not have red blood vessels which according to the lecturer sums up the idea that the spheres are not necessarily the remains of red blood cells.
Finally, the author states that, presence of collagen which is a prime component of living bone tissue and forms collagen matrix corresponds to the fact that the tissue is in association with bone tissue as collagen is the type of biochemical material that is expected to be found in bone tissue. The lecturer opposes by srguing thatcollagen can not last longer than 1000 years whereas the fossil of the T Rex bone is 70 million year old. According to theory collagen can not sustain upto 70 million year. So the collagen found in the 70 million year old bone may be of the recent time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 269, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Additionally,
...lls for transporting oxygen to tissues. Additionally the author contends that the size of th...
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Line 5, column 406, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...d blood cells. The lecturer opposes the authors idea by saying that similar spheres wer...
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Line 5, column 493, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'animals'' or 'animal's'?
Suggestion: animals'; animal's
...e also found on other animals and those animals dod not have red blood vessels which ac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, may, second, secondly, so, whereas
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 30.3222958057 148% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1821.0 1373.03311258 133% => OK
No of words: 373.0 270.72406181 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88203753351 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.04702891845 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44783716606 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.44235924933 0.540411800872 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 551.7 419.366225166 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 21.2450331126 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.512081602 49.2860985944 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.076923077 110.228320801 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6923076923 21.698381199 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38461538462 7.06452816374 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.27373068433 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.52367650248 0.272083759551 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.195124233058 0.0996497079465 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0719923624804 0.0662205650399 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.288425715252 0.162205337803 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0869147381852 0.0443174109184 196% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.3589403974 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 53.8541721854 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.0289183223 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.62 12.2367328918 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 63.6247240618 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.498013245 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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