TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task
In this set materials, the reading passage state that in the modern era, the best way for recording data from the patient is electronic records. On the other hand, the listening section brings into the question the reading points by providing different reasons ( and examples).
First of all, the reading passage indicates that saving electronic database has many advantages such as saving money on storing and transferring media records. In contrast, the lecturer opposes this view by mentioning that when doctors want to record data from the patients by the electronic device, also they need to save previous data for the emergency situation. Therefore, they have to pay some money for saving paper base data.
Secondly, the reading argues that some medical errors stem from doctors' handwriting; hence, when doctors use the electronic device this kind of error will be eliminated. Conversely, what the lecturer believes is different. She points that most doctor still use pen and paper for writing, and they use some office staff to change paper base data to the electronic base. Thus, most staff maybe cannot read the doctors' handwriting, so they save error data and make mistakes.
Finally, according to the reading, with the electronic date based, all of the data from the patient are enable and doctors can use it easily. However, the speaker believes that base on USA lows, using patient records is subjected to privacy laws; therefore, when some doctor want to use them need to allowing from patient and low. Also, saving the medical data need to follow the strict rule, and it is the hard situation that people do not tend to follow it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 261, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng points by providing different reasons and examples. First of all, the rea...
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Line 10, column 68, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...eading, with the electronic date based, all of the data from the patient are enable and do...
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Line 10, column 105, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'enabled'.
Suggestion: enabled
...d, all of the data from the patient are enable and doctors can use it easily. However,...
^^^^^^
Line 10, column 195, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... speaker believes that base on USA lows, using patient records is subjected to pr...
^^
Line 10, column 294, Rule ID: NEED_TO_VBG[1]
Message: Did you mean 'need to allow'?
Suggestion: need to allow
...fore, when some doctor want to use them need to allowing from patient and low. Also, saving the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, in contrast, kind of, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1384.0 1373.03311258 101% => OK
No of words: 274.0 270.72406181 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05109489051 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41493347133 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 145.348785872 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540145985401 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 419.366225166 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3682551592 49.2860985944 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.333333333 110.228320801 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8333333333 21.698381199 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.9166666667 7.06452816374 197% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.393852601807 0.272083759551 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136512459457 0.0996497079465 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833523036965 0.0662205650399 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237011777903 0.162205337803 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0470406285905 0.0443174109184 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.3589403974 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 53.8541721854 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 63.6247240618 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.