Tpo-extra writing 3

Essay topics: Tpo-extra writing 3

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Both the reading and listening parts offer two opposite views about the anting action. While the passage lists three possible advantages of anting; the professor, on the other hand, asserts that there are no clear clues about these benefits and these are unconvincing.

First of all, the article considered that the simultaneous occurrence of anting and feather loss of birds are the correlated, and considered anting as a relief for skin irritation caused by feather loss. On the contrary, the lecturer disapproves this link and asserts that there is a feasibility that anting occurs in summer since ants are abundant and easy to find at this season. Furthermore, the loss of feather also happens for the sake of another reason which is irrelevant to the anting. So, as they happen in the identical season can be a coincidence. Therefore, there is no evidence the anting alleviates the skin irritation.

Secondly, meanwhile, the text said that the formic acid protects birds from external parasites, the instructor, in contrast, rejects this benefit too. As he explains, if it was valid, the anting birds should not be attacked by parasites; otherwise, according to the research conducted the effect of anting, both the anting and not anting birds are attacked by the same number of parasites. Thus, the anting and formic acid do not defense the birds from parasites.

Finally, the passage mentioned that the formic acid causes the ants to taste good and birds eat them later; however, the professor casts doubt on the accuracy of this assertation too. Based on his description, the rubbing a of formic acid does not warranty that birds eat ants later. For instance, while birds also rub the soap or cigarette to their feather, they do not eat them later. Consequently, engaging in the anting does not prove that birds eat ant later.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Both the reading and listening parts off...
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...benefits and these are unconvincing. First of all, the article considered tha...
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Line 3, column 498, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , as” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ason which is irrelevant to the anting. So, as they happen in the identical season can...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...nting alleviates the skin irritation. Secondly, meanwhile, the text said that ...
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...not defense the birds from parasites. Finally, the passage mentioned that the ...
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Line 7, column 226, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
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.... Based on his description, the rubbing a of formic acid does not warranty that b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in contrast, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1535.0 1373.03311258 112% => OK
No of words: 306.0 270.72406181 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01633986928 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64448353707 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 145.348785872 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529411764706 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 419.366225166 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.25165562914 399% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1645035234 49.2860985944 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.642857143 110.228320801 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8571428571 21.698381199 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0714285714 7.06452816374 185% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.3589403974 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 63.6247240618 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.7273730684 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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