In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in electronic databases rather than on paper. It is argued that storing patients’ medical records in electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping.
Reducing Costs
First, the use of electronic records can help reduce costs by saving money on storing and transferring medical records. While paper records require a significant amount of storage space, electronic medical records take up virtually no space. Moreover, by having patients’ records computerized in databases, doctors can easily access the records from almost anywhere and can easily duplicate and transfer them when necessary. This costs much less than copying, faxing, or transporting paper records from one location to another.
Preventing Errors
Second, electronic medical records are crucial to reducing the chances of medical errors. Illegible handwriting, improper transcription of data, and nonstandard organization of paper records have caused errors that in some cases have had serious consequences for the patients’ health. In contrast, electronic records are associated with standardization of forms and legible computer fonts and thus minimize the possibility of human error.
Aiding Research
Third, electronic medical records can greatly aid medical research by making it possible to gather large amounts of data from patient records. It is often impractical, impossible, or prohibitively expensive to manually go through thousands of patients’ paper records housed in doctors’ offices. However, with the existence of electronic medical records, it would be simple to draw out the needed information from the medical databases because the databases are already formatted for data collection. Once in the electronic system, the records could be accessed from any research location.
The reading passage discussed several advantages of electronic databases of medical records, which want to persuade doctors to adopt it. The author proposes three advantages to support ideas. However, the speaker holds these arguments questionable.
First of all, the article claims that the electronic databases could reduce the costs. Nevertheless, the lecture points out that it cannot really save the space to store medical records. Most doctors still use the paper to note patients' information as the backup, even if some of them already adopt the electronic medical record. As a result, this method could not save the space and even make the process more complicated.
Second, the writer says the new record could decrease the chances of errors. On the other hand, the lecturer argues that many doctors get used to utilize the pen to write down the examination. When they are diagnosing patients, doctors like to pen all the information of the diagnosis on papers firstly and then type these information into the computer. Therefore, it will not reduce the chances to make errors because they still keep writing.
Furthermore, the author states that the electronic record could aid to do researches. However, the speaker contends that although the databases could easy to let the researcher access the medical data in theory, actually, it is not so easy to obtain them. In the US, private information has been protected very well. If someone wants to access the information, he or she needs to follow a series strict process, and then they have the right to read it. Unfortunately, even though researchers have finished the applying, the patients still could block their own information if they do not want to be searched. Thus, in fact, this new ways have any help on research.
To sum up, all the arguments mentioned in the reading are plausible according to the speaker.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 29, Rule ID: NEW_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'record'.
Suggestion: record
...licated. Second, the writer says the new record could decrease the chances of errors. O...
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Line 5, column 318, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...agnosis on papers firstly and then type these information into the computer. Therefore, it will n...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, really, second, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, in fact, as a result, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1582.0 1373.03311258 115% => OK
No of words: 310.0 270.72406181 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10322580645 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6719415398 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 145.348785872 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567741935484 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 419.366225166 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.25165562914 399% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.9707926095 49.2860985944 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.8888888889 110.228320801 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2222222222 21.698381199 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3333333333 7.06452816374 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249684671516 0.272083759551 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.067017183956 0.0996497079465 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0793073554532 0.0662205650399 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119569567268 0.162205337803 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0742070405134 0.0443174109184 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.3589403974 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 12.2367328918 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 63.6247240618 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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