Effective learning requires time, comfort and peace so it is impossible to combine study and employment. Study and employment distract one from another. To what extent do you think the statements are realistic ? Support your opinion with examples.
In this contemporary era, the human society is forging ahead at an amazing rate in various realms. Yet, at the same time, many problems has arisen, a grave issue that whether study could coincide with employment or not has triggered intensive controversy. From my point of view, study and employment can balance to a large extend.
Undeniably, it is more likely that work experience that is practical experience could associate knowledge to support students get at better understanding and study effectively on what they learn in classes. For instance, those who study performing have a part time job in film companies would contribute to their professional skills. Furthermore, the unique experience in workplace can support students improve learning efficiency, acquiring critical thinking and problem-solving skills, which not only benefit their study effectively but also benefit their future life.
There is an opponent view that employment would distract attention from study. In particular, it is hard to make study effectively after a long and exhausting shift. However, it should recognize that students have options to determine how long they spend on work and study, which means they have capacity to manage their time. students should learn how to balance work and study just like they are able to balance study and entertainment.
To summarize, from what have been discussed, I highly support the idea that the experience from employment gives insight into study, which promote effective learning at school.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, for instance, in particular
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.5418719212 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 6.10837438424 131% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 8.36945812808 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 5.94088669951 168% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 20.9802955665 100% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 31.9359605911 94% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 5.75862068966 243% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1304.0 1207.87684729 108% => OK
No of words: 238.0 242.827586207 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47899159664 5.00649968141 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92775363542 3.92707691288 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84912369438 2.71678728327 105% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 139.433497537 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609243697479 0.580463131201 105% => OK
syllable_count: 400.5 379.143842365 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.6157635468 108% => OK
Article: 3.0 1.56157635468 192% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.71428571429 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.65517241379 164% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6551724138 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.5024630542 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.6474059896 50.4703680194 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.545454545 104.977214359 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6363636364 20.9669160288 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.18181818182 7.25397266985 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.33497536946 94% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 6.9802955665 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 2.75862068966 109% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238982864893 0.242375264174 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0954773259904 0.0925447433944 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451665645914 0.071462118173 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14701827098 0.151781067708 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0104978422635 0.0609392437508 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 12.6369458128 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 53.1260098522 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.9458128079 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 11.5310837438 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.32886699507 106% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 55.0591133005 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.94827586207 111% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.3980295567 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.5123152709 105% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.