Some people think placing advertisements in schools is a great resource for public schools that need additional funding, but others think it exploits children by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors.
Choose which position you most agree with and discuss why you chose that position. Support your point of view with details from your own experiences, observations or reading.
Recently, the phenomenon of putting advertisements in public schools and its corresponding impact has sparked a heated debate. Although, contested by many that it is mere the exploiting of captive children. Such issue is regarded thoroughly as both constructive and positive. I am inclined towards that funds collected from these advertisements can be a plus and will analyze it through this essay.
First of all, from sociological standpoint, sponsorship can provide pupils with noticeable effects, which is rooted in the fact that funds can be used in the prosperity of school and events held for the students, are inextricably bound up. In my own experience, as a grade 10th student, it was possible only due to the sponsorship of a hand wash that I was able to train myself with the latest equipment and heir a level A boxing coach. Eventually won the state title. Thus, the beneficial ramification of school being funded by the advertisers can be seen apparently.
On the other hand, within the realm of psychology, the factor of exploiting students and forcibly made them the advertiser may produce detrimental effects on their mental health. According to a research undertaken by the students of prestigious university asserted the downside of advertisement correlated negatively with not having the trust onto the management. However, the amount and material of the advertisement could be managed. Hence, it is correct to presume the preconceived notion of placing advertisement for additional funding is terrific.
To recapitulate, although both sides have compelling arguments, but I profoundly agrees that the benefits of sponsorships and other funds in schools far outweighs its drawbacks.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'agree'
Suggestion: agree
... compelling arguments, but I profoundly agrees that the benefits of sponsorships and o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, first, hence, however, if, may, so, thus, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.5418719212 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 6.10837438424 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 8.36945812808 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 5.94088669951 101% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 20.9802955665 95% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 31.9359605911 116% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.75862068966 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1445.0 1207.87684729 120% => OK
No of words: 268.0 242.827586207 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39179104478 5.00649968141 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 3.92707691288 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21151191104 2.71678728327 118% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 139.433497537 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.64552238806 0.580463131201 111% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 379.143842365 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 1.56157635468 256% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.65517241379 164% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.5024630542 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.5916568167 50.4703680194 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.153846154 104.977214359 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6153846154 20.9669160288 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.92307692308 7.25397266985 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.33497536946 37% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 6.9802955665 100% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 2.91625615764 137% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170413568082 0.242375264174 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0568924996526 0.0925447433944 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0460393411567 0.071462118173 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0960267129572 0.151781067708 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0273283903024 0.0609392437508 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 12.6369458128 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.1260098522 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.9458128079 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 11.5310837438 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.81 8.32886699507 118% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 55.0591133005 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.94827586207 116% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.3980295567 96% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.5123152709 95% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 76.5 Out of 90
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