Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?
One of the most significant period of a human being starts when an individual decide to become independent. Some chose to do this later, other prefer becoming independent while they are young adults. In my opinion, the latter opinion is better due to the fact that they learn to be responsible and because it is a first step which precedes greater commitments. I will explain my statement in the following essay.
First and foremost, when a person decides to leave his home, he decides to become responsible because there are many problems he has to face by his own. In other words, he is in charge and has to deal with all the aspects of live such us earning money, paying bills, rent, cooking, doing the cleaning and the laundry. My experience is a compelling example. I left my family when I was 19 because the university I chose was located 200 miles away from my hometown, so once I got there I was on my own. In the beginning it was quite difficult because I had to do all the chores all by myself, and plus I had to study a lot. Not to mention that I was not able to cook, and my first dishes were ecological disasters. However, after a while I gathered myself and I learned to manage both my households and mu study. Therefore, I learned to be proficient early in my life.
To continue with, leaving home early is of paramount importance because it is a great step towards bigger commitments. When living alone, an individual has to deal with financial problems to, he must figure out how to do savings and not to run out of money. Furthermore, he experiences unexpectedly situations such us apartment flooding, conflicts with neighbors, colleagues, and he is the one who has to find viable solution for all these. These are useful tests, because once one encounter them he founds how to manage them, and as a result it is going to be easier when similar crisis will emerge in a future time. For instance, these experiences can be a live-savior when you have a family, a partner and kids, and when time become extremely valuable. Pats events will be a precious guide in order to take the right and effective decisions.
In conclusion, it is better for a young adult to undergo independence as soon as possible. This is because, this experience is going to teach him what responsibility is and because it is a salient step for his adult life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1935.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56367924528 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72975798033 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525943396226 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3948016458 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.75 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.65 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179739200418 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.055737125231 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0872968311255 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125781221465 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0680170945694 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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