The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of competition and not cooperation. Competition is one of the most basic instinct of human beings, it was our competitive spirite rather than cooperation which kept us alive, during our days on Savana competing with voracious wolfs and tigers. This instinct also need not be instilled in anyone, it is already present in the human genome and have always brought the best out of us. There are several instances in history from which it can be observed that how competition brought the best out of us, for example, Thomas Edison verses Tesla brought the best and sustanaible option of alternating current rather there had been no competion then we would still be using Edison's Direct current based appliances.
Competetion is not something that we have search for in our lives, we compete in every aspect of live till our last breath, which is itself is a competition till the end. Right from our childhood, we have the ability and tendency to compete. School competitions, competing with children of same age, competition for job and competition for life parterner. Cooperation which looks like an essential part of life but it is not as much important as competition. Cooperation hinders the growth of an individual, although might be necessary in some instances, makes people languid. If people cooperate a lot then there will be no engendering of new ideas, there will be no new approaches and methods to solve any problem and the whole worlds development stops.
For instance if there would have been competition between Bill Gates and Steve Jobs then there would have been no Microsoft and Apple that we see today. Here are two things to notice Xerox the first ever company to develop a mouse and graphic user interface due to its extreme cooperation lots its competitive advantage, it could have been the conglomerate of electronics industry rather Microsoft or Apple. Competition not only brings the best out of the people but it also makes people audacious, people start to take risks which they would have certainly avoided if they would have been cooperative. Even in present day scenario compete with each other head to head then only comsumer gets the finest products at cheaper rates. Competition is excellent of countries, if people of the country are competitive enough then they can make a mark in world in the name of their counrty. If people are not competitive then their country stands no chance to standing any where in the global perspective. Similarly, things can be applied to the leadership, if a leader is competitive then he can encourage his whole team to perform better than others and can elicite results which could have not been possible if he would not have been competitive.
However, ther are instance where excessive competition will act as a spurious mechanism to decieve people. If the competition is very high in certain sectors than to over come the competition people generally employ some tacticts, it results harmful for all whi are involved in it. For example, two companies are very competitive in a certain sector then they will force their employies to work over time. This not only facilitates the production of products of cheaper quality but also creates additional mental pressure on workers. Such things are deleterious in all aspects, thus is such cases cooperation is must to maintain high moral of the workers and to maintain the quality.
There is no doubt that competition is essential in every aspect of life for a countries people to have excellent products, life quality. For a society to grow people should be trained to be competitive and thrive for what they want. This help is generating new ideas and methods to tackel several problem of life and society is better way.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 730, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'worlds'' or 'world's'?
Suggestion: worlds'; world's
...hods to solve any problem and the whole worlds development stops. For instance if the...
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Line 3, column 23, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had been'?
Suggestion: had been
...velopment stops. For instance if there would have been competition between Bill Gates and Stev...
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Line 3, column 574, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had been'?
Suggestion: had been
...ey would have certainly avoided if they would have been cooperative. Even in present day scenar...
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Line 3, column 656, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: head-to-head
...nt day scenario compete with each other head to head then only comsumer gets the finest prod...
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Line 3, column 883, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... in world in the name of their counrty. If people are not competitive then their c...
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Line 3, column 961, Rule ID: ANY_WHERE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'anywhere'?
Suggestion: anywhere
...ir country stands no chance to standing any where in the global perspective. Similarly, t...
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Line 4, column 612, Rule ID: MUST_HAVE_TO[1]
Message: After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use 'must' or 'have to' here.
Suggestion: must; have to
...ects, thus is such cases cooperation is must to maintain high moral of the workers and ...
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Line 5, column 289, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun problem seems to be countable; consider using: 'several problems'.
Suggestion: several problems
...erating new ideas and methods to tackel several problem of life and society is better way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, similarly, so, still, then, thus, for example, for instance, no doubt

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 41.0 19.5258426966 210% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3228.0 2235.4752809 144% => OK
No of words: 654.0 442.535393258 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93577981651 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.05701727356 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7243879233 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 309.0 215.323595506 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47247706422 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 1023.3 704.065955056 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2127956964 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.12 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.16 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.24 5.21951772744 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199870328805 0.243740707755 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0677730443025 0.0831039109588 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115066263428 0.0758088955206 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126361065983 0.150359130593 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0712224064768 0.0667264976115 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 100.480337079 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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