The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books.
"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The Monarch books open a cafe in its store on recommendation from Board of Directors of Monarch Books. Monarch, having been in business at same location from more than twenty years which indicate that it is famous and demanding business. The children's book section replace by cafe is not a good idea for such a settled business. The Director took the decision on the basis of only report of national census. There are evidences which contradict the decision which should be considered by Director before jumped to the conclusion.
Moreover, the national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of population under age ten but the books for children above ten are consummated same. The percentage decline from base year and it may be possible there are some reasons for the same and population will be elevate in next year. The children's book especially like comics are very demanding in the market not only by children but also by others. For example, my friend who is about 25 years old and she used to collect comics collection for children of her play school.
Furthermore, the people attracted towards cafe which is totally different from selling books. The Regal Books opened new store and tries to settle down in the market. The new store has to fight tough fight in the market because of already present Monarch Books. The Regal’s used strategy of opening a cafe with book store to attract the people but it is not a good idea because the people who love reading and want to buy books do not need any other incentive like cafe. The Monarch has been serving good services to the city for more than twenty years and people like it as it is. For example in India the people like Ayurveda and to sell Ayurveda material no need to wrap it in attractive wrappers as like other materials are wrapped.
Additionally, the readers like silent place and the order of pages of new book. Due to cafe inside the Book store disturb buyers and they gradually disinterested in the store. In spite of opening a cafe the Monarch has to open a reading space which attracts the public and the business enhanced. To copy a business strategy is not a success key. To get success in market business man has to apply more innovative ideas.
Finally, the Monarch Books have to rethink their recommendation and do something different.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 406 350
No. of Characters: 1897 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.489 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.672 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.472 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.799 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.429 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.302 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.517 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.092 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 500, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'comics'' or 'comic's'?
Suggestion: comics'; comic's
...ut 25 years old and she used to collect comics collection for children of her play sch...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 263, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...cause of already present Monarch Books. The Regal's used strategy of opening a...
^^^
Line 5, column 477, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...not need any other incentive like cafe. The Monarch has been serving good services ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, as to, for example, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1945.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 406.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79064039409 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54364341409 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485221674877 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.3369217475 57.8364921388 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.619047619 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14285714286 5.70786347227 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38035375958 0.218282227539 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11451107439 0.0743258471296 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128168357881 0.0701772020484 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216912979043 0.128457276422 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111254703568 0.0628817314937 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.3799401198 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.5979740519 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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