People learn things better from those at their own level- such as fellow students or co workers- than from those at a higher level, such as teachers or supervisors
It is virtually agreed that people need to study their whole life, from different sources such as books, their own experience and people around. However, there are debates over which group of people will be more favorable to one's study process. Some believe that it is more beneficial seek information from their peers than teachers or managers. However, in my opinion, the advantages of learning from people at higher level outweigh that of learning from people at the same level as ours
First of all, teachers and supervisors possess more knowledge and work experience, thus, can provide more helpful information classmates or co-workers. It is obvious that one's peers may help him or her in some areas which they excel at but they can never be as proficient as the superior. For example, when I was studying at high school, I was terrible at Physics. Therefore, I asked my friend, Alex, who was adept in the subject to help me. While she exerted a great effort to tutor me, some of my questions were beyond her scope. On the other hand, my teacher, whom 1 came to subsequently, immediately gave me correct answer with logical explanation. Another illustration is when I was in college, my friends and I once sketched a detailed plan for an economic research. We learned from each other during the process and supplemented each other's weaknesses. We thought the scheme was perfect but the professor guiding our project could still point out deal of flaws, drawing from his many years' researching. Thanks to him, we can detect the defects and improve our strategy and method. All in all, as people standing higher in the work or study hierarchy apparently have more knowledge, both theoretical and practical, the assistance that they offered is unparalleled
Moreover, people above us have training techniques and experience, therefore, facilitate the studying process. Even in the case when the contemporaries in the class or office can offer sufficient and precise information, learning from the superior still merits more. Since teachers or managers are trained or at least have experience in giving instruction, they can convey information more effectively. An instance is when I was doing an internship last summer, another intern taught me how to prepare application dossiers for business licences but it was confusing. Hence I turned to my supervisor for more clarification. Although her direction was brief and in fact, had the same content as that of the intern, I could understand much more clearly because of the way she guided me. In short, people can learn considerably easier from the one teaching them at school and college or supervising them at the workplace
In conclusion, I believe that people learn things better from the superior because of their knowledge and experience and their pedagogy compared to one's fellow. While aids supplied by peers should not be ignored, people should try their best to ask for guidance from people
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: economic research
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...business licences but it was confusing. Hence I turned to my supervisor for more clar...
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Suggestion: one's
...perience and their pedagogy compared to ones fellow. While aids supplied by peers sh...
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Suggestion:
...eir best to ask for guidance from people
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, thus, while, at least, for example, in conclusion, in fact, in short, such as, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2477.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 489.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0654396728 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77421537116 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550102249489 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 756.0 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.4542436871 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.952380952 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2857142857 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.80952380952 5.45110844103 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291120145202 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0752468822789 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0915485853145 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206803712549 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111739562296 0.0645574589148 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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