The following appeared as part of a petition sent to residents of Youngtown by an environmental protection group:
“The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. This sanctuary is essential to the survival of the 300 bird species that live in our area. Although only a small percentage of the land will be sold to Smith, the proposed development will have disastrous consequences for our area. The company plans to build a small hotel on the land. Although they have promised to ensure the preservation of the sanctuary, there is no way that their plans will do anything but harm the sanctuary. There are no circumstances under which this sale will benefit our community, which relies on tourists who visit primarily to see our magnificent bird population.”
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The above part of a petition tend to claim that Smith Corporations that plans to build a hotel on the land will have disastrous consequences on the sanctuary. Despite promising to preserve the sanctuary the environmental protection group claims this sale will explicitly harm the sanctuary. The above reports lacks sufficient amount of data that provides us an analysis about the approximate percentage of the land that the corporation has actually demanded for. Furthermore, they have claimed that the sale can never benefit the community without providing appropriate manifests that strengthens the argument.
In the final statement they concluded that the sale will never benefit the community. The statement is way too extreme. In order to prove the above claimed statement, there has to be some valid reasons along with some empirical examples. The report lacks both of them. There should be some investigation made upon this issue and the conclusions may turn out to be the opposite. Demanding a small proportion of land in order to enhance tourism may benefit the community in some way or the other.
The petition says a small percentage of land will be sold to Smith, however, they should provide an approximation of the percentage of the land that will be sold to the Smith and the amount of the land to be paid by the Smiths to the community. It might turn out that the proportion of the land is much smaller than the expectations and the amount concerned might be a myriad.
The report claims that the corporation will harm the birds living in the sanctuary. It is inappropriate to make an assumptions that explicitly impugns the integrity of the corporation. In order to question the corporation's will, there has to be some example or proof that strengthens the above stated critical argument.
Therefore based upon the above qualms, it would be inappropriate to dismiss the permit to develop the land of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. Further research and analysis may lead to a conclusion that outlines the altruistic intentions of the corporation. It ultimately begets the development of the corporation as well as the community.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 354 350
No. of Characters: 1766 1500
No. of Different Words: 158 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.338 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.989 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.897 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.888 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.325 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.516 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 310, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[2]
Message: You should probably use 'lack'.
Suggestion: lack
...y harm the sanctuary. The above reports lacks sufficient amount of data that provides...
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Line 3, column 427, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g a small proportion of land in order to enhance tourism may benefit the communit...
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Line 7, column 113, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an assumption' or simply 'assumptions'?
Suggestion: an assumption; assumptions
... sanctuary. It is inappropriate to make an assumptions that explicitly impugns the integrity o...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...s the above stated critical argument. Therefore based upon the above qualms, it would b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, well, as to, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1805.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 354.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0988700565 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96208633241 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.449152542373 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.9523940879 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.277777778 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72222222222 5.70786347227 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240801300369 0.218282227539 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0652007365519 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683125198274 0.0701772020484 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129378831773 0.128457276422 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543027907122 0.0628817314937 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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