Several charitable organizations in Pleasantville provide opportunities for teenagers to engage in community service. These organizations have a great need for volunteers, but in recent years, the number of teenage volunteers has significantly declined.
The Pleasantville School Board should take measures to increase the number of volunteers. Teachers, parents, and other community members agree that it is important for young people to learn the value of community service. Requiring high school students to engage in community service would provide much-needed assistance to worthy local charities and would also help young people understand the importance of giving back to their community. For this reason, the Pleasantville School Board should institute a program requiring students of Pleasantville High School to complete 40 hours of community service prior to graduation.
The argument states that Pleasantville School Board must institute a program for students to complete 40 hours of community service prior to graduation. So that this will increase the number of volunteers as a support for local charities. Stated in this way the argument fails to provide key factors, based on which the argument can be evaluated. The conclusion for the argument lies on the assumptions for which there is no proper evidence. So, the argument is weak and unconvincing.
First, the argument readily assumes that teenagers are lacking the value of community service as there is a decrease number of teenage volunteers. This statement is a stretch because they might be going to different charities that offer better community services than the local services. Let us take an example of people visiting a particular sacred place. If there is a decrease in the number of visitors to that place that does not mean that peoples values for religions have decreased. They might be more interested in visiting other sacred places because of their own personal reasons. So, the decrease in the volunteers might be because they are more interested in taking part in some other charitable organizations. The argument could have been lot more convincing if it explicitly stated that teenagers are not taking part in any other charitable organizations.
Second, the argument states that there will be an increase in volunteers for local charities by making a mandatory program of 40 hours of community service before graduation. This is again a very weak and unconvincing assumption with no proper evidence. Because, students might go to other charitable services rather than going to the local charities to complete this mandatory program. For example if a school mandates donations to be made to any local charities in order to increase the funding. It does not neccessarily mean that people will donate to only local charities. They may donate to other non-local charitable organizations. So, it is not guaranteed that teenagers will go to the local charities to complete 40 hrs of community services. The argument could have been strengthened if it explicitly stated that students need to complete the community service in local charities.
For the above mentioned reasons the argument is flawed and unconvincing. The argument can be considerably strengthened if the author had stated all the necessary information. In order to assess as decision, it is necessary to have full information of all the contributing factors. As the information provided does not mention all the contributing factors it is flawed and open to debate.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
arguments are duplicated
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 426 350
No. of Characters: 2174 1500
No. of Different Words: 169 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.543 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.103 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.881 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 164 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 131 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 103 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 66 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.158 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.318 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.493 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 255, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ing assumption with no proper evidence. Because, students might go to other charitable ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, then, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2218.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 426.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20657276995 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96950119685 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.399061032864 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 708.3 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.2460161191 57.8364921388 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 92.4166666667 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.75 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.08333333333 5.70786347227 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.20758483034 183% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172328626923 0.218282227539 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0564262593826 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0517732219828 0.0701772020484 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108142287185 0.128457276422 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0367209980256 0.0628817314937 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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