Several charitable organizations in Pleasantville provide opportunities for teenagers to engage in community service. These organizations have a great need for volunteers, but in recent years, the number of teenage volunteers has significantly declined.
The Pleasantville School Board should take measures to increase the number of volunteers. Teachers, parents, and other community members agree that it is important for young people to learn the value of community service. Requiring high school students to engage in community service would provide much-needed assistance to worthy local charities and would also help young people understand the importance of giving back to their community. For this reason, the Pleasantville School Board should institute a program requiring students of Pleasantville High School to complete 40 hours of community service prior to graduation.
The voluntry service should be a great opportunties for the students of Pleasantville to learn and understand the need of comuntity service in their locality. Hence it is really importnat for the students to enroll into these programs. The local people of that town has provided a solution to increase the volunteers, which had declined from past few time. But this solution might not be the most effective for resloving the problem. This measures planned by the people of Pleasantville conatins flaws which needs to be resolved before implementing it.
The Pleasantville school board should think about the pros and cons of implementing new measures on the studnets for incresaing the communtiy services volunteers. It would be really effective if community service is integrated in students gradutation program which would make these students more connected and better human in their life. But these measures do contain cons,For instance if a student who is not able to get good grades in his exams would most likely to focus on his academics instead of community services, these new measures would become burdensome for these dull students. This cannot be concluded saying that all students in Pleasantville school are getting good grades in exam, there is no inforamtion provided by the argument above to saying that all students are good at academics.
There might be other factors too which might effect the decline of voluneers in communtiy sevices in Pleasantville. The teenagers might be really intrested in sports or any other activites then community services. The school also might increased the burden on students to study more, which would indirectly reduce the time of students to spend on community services. If the school is the cause of the reduction of time for students to volunteer, then the new measures would be can not be effect at all. There is no evidence provided for the cause of decline in student volunteers in town of Pleasantville.
The season where this survey was conducted might be the session of exams where the students will be busy in preparing for their exams and would not have enough time for community services. My opinion would be concluded by saying that this argument conatins flaws which needs to be corrected and refarmed for having a better effect on the studnets of Pleasantville school and the community instead of wasting time on ineffective measures.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 395 350
No. of Characters: 1984 1500
No. of Different Words: 168 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.458 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.023 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.728 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 144 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.688 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.095 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.438 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.348 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.535 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.086 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 160, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...of comuntity service in their locality. Hence it is really importnat for the students...
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Line 1, column 348, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'few times'.
Suggestion: few times
...olunteers, which had declined from past few time. But this solution might not be the mos...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 373, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , For
...life. But these measures do contain cons,For instance if a student who is not able t...
^^^^
Line 5, column 46, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
... might be other factors too which might effect the decline of voluneers in communtiy s...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, really, so, then, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2018.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 394.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12182741117 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78807770863 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.444162436548 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 621.0 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2118407876 57.8364921388 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.125 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.625 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 5.70786347227 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171812210177 0.218282227539 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0719376439132 0.0743258471296 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0383057251693 0.0701772020484 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122896760408 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0234664174767 0.0628817314937 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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