"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
The problem in the argument is the naïve assumption that prohibiting skateboarding in the plaza will increase the number of shoppers in the plaza. There is no clear evidence as to why the number of shoppers in the plaza were decreasing.
It could be the case that new plazas could have been opened in the vicinity of Central Plaza, which could have attracted all the shoppers with artful sales and thus the shoppers in the Central plaza could have been reduced. There could have been a lack of renovation inside the plaza which has steadily reduced the inflow of shoppers.
There is no conclusive evidence provided by the writer that prohibiting skateboarders inside the premises of the plaza could ameliorate the number of shoppers. It could be that excessive littering and vandalism per se could have been the primary cause of the reduction of number of shoppers. Furthermore, most of the individual shops inside the plaza could have been closed for a long time, which further reduces the number of shoppers.
The writer states that over two years, the number of shoppers has declined steadily. Now, two years is a very long time. So, saying simply that the number of shoppers has decreased steadily doesn’t mean that the shoppers were actually decreased by a huge amount at the end of two years. For ex, if there were 10000 shoppers initially, and the amount steadily decreased to 9000 after two years doesn’t show a significant decrease in the number of shoppers. There are always people leaving and entering a city, change in buying habits of people, getting inured to online shopping, etc which could have decreased the number of shoppers.
If the city prohibits skateboarding and if the recommendations don’t show likely results, this will send a negative message to the skateboarders. Moreover, skateboarders who used to visit the plaza regularly would also refrain themselves from visiting the plaza further. The shops inside the plaza would suffer a huge loss and eventually the economy of the place would decline meteorically.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not OK. need to argue:
Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 70 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 342 350
No. of Characters: 1664 1500
No. of Different Words: 151 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.3 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.865 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.622 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 115 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.8 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.323 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.445 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.688 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.224 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, furthermore, if, moreover, so, thus, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 28.8173652695 38% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1729.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 339.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10029498525 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74976257369 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463126843658 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 705.55239521 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.9175996106 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.266666667 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86666666667 5.70786347227 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313896557051 0.218282227539 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115204094571 0.0743258471296 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641854975833 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17623860362 0.128457276422 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0595006677783 0.0628817314937 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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