Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
There have been numerous occasions where people with very low chances have made it to the epitome of their careers. As the saying goes, “Where there is a will, there is a way”, a person with strong determination and motivation, with hard work, always succeeds in his/her field.
The statement revolves around the fact that educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed. The thought process of each and every individual is very contrasting and dynamic. As he/she grows, there could be a colossal change in the mindset of the individual. A random student, who is weak in his/her academics, for now, may be an exceptional researcher in the coming years, provided he has proper guidance and interest and vice versa. Referring to the example of Edison, he was an average student in terms of academics, in his childhood. Had he been encouraged to pursue some other filed, the world would have not seen the face of light coming out of a light bulb for a few more years.
Laconically, one can always argue that if a student is imposed with certain restrictions in the path of his/her career, he/she may loose focus as well as interest in his, imposed, field of study. This further reduces the amount of confidence and makes people a liability.
The statement only focuses at the current ability of the student, which neglects the fact that the all-round development of the student is yet to reach the paragon. This naïve assumption of capability makes a student no less that a liability, resulting is loss of interest for a particular field of study.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 132, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[4]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
... the path of his/her career, he/she may loose focus as well as interest in his, impos...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1370.0 2235.4752809 61% => OK
No of words: 279.0 442.535393258 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91039426523 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78828628539 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 215.323595506 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587813620072 0.4932671777 119% => OK
syllable_count: 431.1 704.065955056 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0733591679 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.166666667 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.41666666667 5.21951772744 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305364192554 0.243740707755 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107165268161 0.0831039109588 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.211044930142 0.0758088955206 278% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143910160504 0.150359130593 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103586047028 0.0667264976115 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 100.480337079 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.