Progress should be the aim of any great society. people too often cling unnecessarily to obsolete ways of thinking and acting because of both a high comfort level and a fear of the unknown.
It is said that all great societies should aim to get progressed. Progression should be the main aim of each society. Also, it is argued that the majority of people only rely on obsolete ways just because they are either simpler or more familiar. I agree with this argument to some extent.
On the one hand, progress should be the aim of any society. This cannot be gained without ambitious people in each society. People who have great aims in their lives and try to invent or discover new things in the world and in this way, they help their society to progress. We cannot say all people only use obsolete ways just because they are simple or individuals are afraid of experiencing unknown things. All scientists, artists or even politicians try to find new ways for the progression of their countries. It has been the aim of all great people throughout history. For example, the construction of the airplane by Wright brothers or the invention of power by Edison and the discovery of the gravity rule of the earth by Newton show the efforts of humans for the progression of human society. In modern life, we can see that scientists try to solve the majority of current problems with new ways such as using renewable energies for the reduction of air pollution or finding another planet except the earth for living because of population growth. Therefore, it can be seen that in each society there are some people who do not rely on obsolete ways and have endeavor to find new things.
On the other hand, the majority of people prefer to follow old and obsolete ways just because they do not have enough patience and perseverance to find new ways. The majority of people only want to follow other ways and they do not like to experience new things. These people are afraid of unknown things and believe that they do not have enough talent for the creation of innovative things. Additionally, they claim that the most convenient way of gaining things is to follow the old ways. Unfortunately, the number of these people exceeds ambitious people but most of the time one creative person can compensate for the shortages existed in the world.
To summarize, in my view, in each society there are two types of people. some of them are ambitious and some of them not. But all societies should try to progress in the world using their ambitious people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1168, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'endeavored'.
Suggestion: endeavored
...o do not rely on obsolete ways and have endeavor to find new things. On the other hand...
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Line 7, column 74, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
... society there are two types of people. some of them are ambitious and some of them ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, for example, such as, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1944.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 414.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69565217391 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48667948864 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 215.323595506 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.427536231884 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 604.8 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.4464709405 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.5714285714 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7142857143 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85714285714 5.21951772744 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251538464477 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0940698314703 0.0831039109588 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0761591272217 0.0758088955206 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160546439128 0.150359130593 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0917738034297 0.0667264976115 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.1392134831 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 12.1639044944 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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