People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and suppo

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People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

People’s behaviour is one of the most sought after topics in psychology and neuroscience disciplines. Human beings are capable of learning and adapting themselves to the environment. Therefore much of the traits of the behaviour of an individual are subject to the exposure to the type of surrounding. Therefore it can be asserted that people’s behaviour is mostly shaped by external forces. But there are certain parts of people’s behaviour that comes by their own making.

To begin with, a child’s behaviour is not shaped inside mother’s womb. They first learn to speak, walk and to show emotions to gain benefits from the surroundings. Up to a certain age, children’s behavior is mostly reflections of what they have learned from their environment i.e. their elders, parents, and friends. For instance, it is very common by some elders to teach offensive or foul language to small children. They reiterate the foul words without hesitation. At a certain age they understand where to use offensive language and where no to. This trait of the behaviour comes from within, not from outside.

It goes without saying that the people of the whole world do not speak one single language. There are thousands of different languages in existence in different parts of the world. Speaking style is one of the components of people’s behavior. Phonetics, tone & style of speaking are quite different in different parts of the world. For instance, the Russian language native speakers emphasize greatly on the sound of ‘r’, but the native speakers of Assamese language mostly ignore the sound of ‘r’. There are also differences of tones. So the accent of speaking, which is a part of human behaviour, is determined by the environment not by people’s own discretion.

Furthermore, it is not commonly observed in modern world that people choose professions other than what they have seen their parents & elderly persons since their childhood. For instance, a farmer’s son will have country side nature and accent due to the exposure to rustic environment. But it is his or her own consideration whether to opt for farming as a profession or not. We also can take example of Abraham Lincoln. He was a son of a cultivator. But he went on to become the president of United States of America. His behavior may have mostly shaped by the external forces, but certainly there used to be traits in his behaviour coming from within.

In sum, human beings are capable of learning from environment and adapting to the surrounding. Although much of the behaviour of an individual is shaped by the forces not of his or her own making, there are certainly components which are determined by their forces of his or her making. We can look at the world surrounding us and find relevant examples.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, look, may, so, therefore, for instance, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 84.0 58.6224719101 143% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2389.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 465.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1376344086 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04338330699 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464516129032 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 732.6 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.7799699032 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.3793103448 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0344827586 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.03448275862 5.21951772744 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.83258426966 331% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109432077907 0.243740707755 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0300867230182 0.0831039109588 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04318344577 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0706269432936 0.150359130593 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281601176777 0.0667264976115 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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