The city of Winston has two large department stores: Namen and Roscoe. Namen is known for its high-end designer fashions, while Roscoe is known for more affordable fashion options. Both Namen and Roscoe are each considering opening another store in the growing suburb of Salem, where the population has grown over 50% in the last three years and where the median income is $75,000. Namen’s executives argue that as population and median income increase, people are willing to spend more money on clothing. However, Roscoe’s executives believe that the suburbs are more family oriented, and therefore their store will be more profitable than their competitor Namen.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The two corporations both are presuming that they will be able to obtain more profit by opening a new store int Salem. However, the assertions does not seem sound because it fails to discern the difference between Winston and Salem, Namen fails to corroborate the relationship between income and the people's willingness to spend it on clothes, and finally Roscoe should elaborate on why suburbs are more family oriented.
First of all, the Winston is a major district while Salem is in the rural area. Therefore even if the two brands open stores to sell their products, it may be unattractive to people residing their. Their fashion may be more pertinent to the city by compromising comfort for style which could be a major reason for the people who prioritize comfort to shun from purchasing the products. To further support the idea, both corporations should elaborate on the styles of clothes they are trying to sell and whether it is attractive to the general public.
Next, the Namen's allegience that more income means profusive spending on clothing seems incogent. People could want to save or invest their extra income rather than spend it on clothes because these people want to prepare for the future. Hence, the Namen company should substantiate the correlation between the average income rate and the willingness to spend the tangential money on clothes.
Finally, Roscoe's argument about suburbian's proclivity towards family seems incoherent. Salem could be experiencing population increase due to the influx of singles wanting to reside with the nature. In that case, the majority of residents may be single and thus will not be family oriented rather, they would actually have no family at all. Consequently, to make the asseveration more persuasive, the executives of the company could provide evidence on the population of the community and their spending habits: whether they are single or married, and whether they spend for themselves or for their families.
In conclusion, for the argument to be logical, it should provide more information regarding the difference of cities and suburbs and their disposition towards clothing, relationship between total income and how thriftyness, and whether the people of the community truly thinks for their kins before themselves.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 368 350
No. of Characters: 1888 1500
No. of Different Words: 185 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.38 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.13 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.692 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.286 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.119 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.643 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.33 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.599 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.049 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 301, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...the relationship between income and the peoples willingness to spend it on clothes, and...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 81, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...trict while Salem is in the rural area. Therefore even if the two brands open stores to s...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 536, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...ell and whether it is attractive to the general public. Next, the Namens allegience that ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 199, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r than spend it on clothes because these people want to prepare for the future. H...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, consequently, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1944.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 368.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28260869565 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75192056796 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51902173913 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.3153786925 57.8364921388 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.857142857 119.503703932 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2857142857 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.35714285714 5.70786347227 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163213968321 0.218282227539 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0596531759584 0.0743258471296 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0354722060745 0.0701772020484 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0973542254458 0.128457276422 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0305313134332 0.0628817314937 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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