The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
It seems that celebrities' opinions are essential to people. However, regarding the different characteristics and various life conditions of people of different ages, a question which arises here is that if the celebrities' ideas are more important for the young generation than older ones. I, personally, think that in comparison to older people, youngsters put more value on celebrities' idea.
To begin with, young people because of the lack of experience and knowledge, always are looking for someone with a prestigious perspective whom they can consider him or her as a role model. Youngsters follow others' opinion, and when it comes about the celebrities' idea, they pay more attention because they accept these people as successful individuals. Youngsters incline to imitate stars because they think celebrities are of the most accurate approach. On the other hand, older adults, thanks to a lot of experiences, think independently about different subjects. They rarely will be affected by others' opinion. Therefore, they do not care about celebrities' point of view because they see them as some inexperienced people that may make mistakes. For example, when an election holds in my country, young people follow the ideas of celebrities about various candidates, and they vote to the candidate that celebrities advocated him or her. However, older people do not pay attention to celebrities idea because they know themselves as a treasure of experience and wisdom and vote independently.
Second, in today's modern world, young people have enormous activities in social media which provide a medium to connect to celebrities such as entertainers and athletes. These days the best way for being aware of others' opinion is the social media in which stars are in the centre of attention. Therefore, in such a circumstance which youngsters are exposed to celebrities' views every moment, it is highly probable that young people get more familiar with their opinions then follow, and put a value on them. Nevertheless, older people are not enthusiastic in social media, and they do not be aware of celebrities' point of view. Hence, when they have less information about famous people, they are less likely to accentuate their opinions. A personal example can drive this notion home. Last year a young boy committed murder unintentionally in my country, some celebrities tried to make the decedent's family satisfied to prevent the boy from being sentenced. I was very impressed by those celebrities' opinion about this subject. However, when I told the story to my grandfather, he said: "I do not care who celebrities are, they should not interfere in this matter".
In conclusion, having taken the two mentioned reasons into account, I do believe that young people put more value on reputed people compared with old ones. Young generation not only want to consider famous people as role models and imitate their perspective, but they also are more exposed to these people's ideas due to social media.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'celebrities'' or 'celebrity's'?
Suggestion: celebrities'; celebrity's
...er people, youngsters put more value on celebrities idea. To begin with, young people beca...
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Line 2, column 252, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'celebrities'' or 'celebrity's'?
Suggestion: celebrities'; celebrity's
...rs opinion, and when it comes about the celebrities idea, they pay more attention because t...
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Line 2, column 572, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[7]
Message: The adverb 'rarely' is usually put between 'will' and 'be'.
Suggestion: will rarely be
...endently about different subjects. They rarely will be affected by others opinion. Therefore, ...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
...bjects. They rarely will be affected by others opinion. Therefore, they do not care ab...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'decedents'' or 'decedent's'?
Suggestion: decedents'; decedent's
...try, some celebrities tried to make the decedents family satisfied to prevent the boy fro...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'celebrities'' or 'celebrity's'?
Suggestion: celebrities'; celebrity's
...entenced. I was very impressed by those celebrities opinion about this subject. However, wh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, regarding, second, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2525.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 483.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22774327122 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89627683656 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490683229814 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 806.4 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6159580233 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.772727273 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9545454545 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.77272727273 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32716265442 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105414563431 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520526688531 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217377055268 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00349659182776 0.0645574589148 5% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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