Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more
money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's world, in which we live, governments are continually concerned about efficiency of their projects in the city, and they seek for sectors which spending money on them bring more benefits for people. In this line of thought. So many experts hold the conviction that city's managers should dedicate more money on artistic projects. Others, on the contrary, stand on the other side of the continuum, stating that support of athletics are more beneficial. I, personally, concur with the latter notion because of two reasons, which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, huge proportion of individuals in a society are into sports. To clarify the concept, in today's societies sports are among the activities that draw attention of, virtually, all people, including kids, youngsters, and adults, as athletes or fans. In other words, athletic events have more audience rather than arts, and number of people that enjoy from spending time watching sport programs are much more that individuals who follow up artistic events in the city. Therefore, should government dedicate more money to athletics, they provide much more number of people with a source of recreation and unwinding. In these circumstances, having a reliable center which receive support from governors to experience more enjoyable time, people will be happier and delighted.
Secondly, sports and sport related event are a lucrative way to increase governments incomes. To be more specific, sports are among the industries that easily attract people from other state. Indeed, if administrators spend money on supporting state's teams they in fact are investing money on project that can make an enormous and sizeable amount of money out of them. Sports events can attract so many people from other cities that bring money with themselves. These event indirectly influence other sectors of the state such as the tourism industry by providing accommodation space for people from other states, transportation systems by commuting people from a place to another, and the food industry though providing food for visitors. Thus, spending money on support of sport teams can influence not only athletics but also other professions in the state.
To wrap it up, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons bring us to the conclusion that it is more beneficial either for people or for government to dedicate more money of sport project rather than arts. For, athletics are fascinating for much more number of people and because sports attract tourist to the state and are a lucrative industry.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 462, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this event' or 'These events'?
Suggestion: This event; These events
...ities that bring money with themselves. These event indirectly influence other sectors of t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, in fact, such as, in other words, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2170.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2798053528 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75660831851 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518248175182 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.4432242865 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.555555556 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8333333333 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55555555556 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23419001269 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.083476479757 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0629621583006 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153664991842 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0252258253027 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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