The government wants to fund one of the following areas to improve children's education. Which one do you think is better? Why?
- hire more teachers to teach in a small class
- make preschool education before kindergarten mandatory
- provide some training courses so that teachers can be more professional
Supporting schools by governments is one of the important factors in developed and developing countries. Governments should assign a budget to make progress on students’ education. In my opinion, the government ought to provide some training courses for teachers to become experts. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
The first factor which advocates my outlook is that if teachers become up-to-date, they will teach students by using high-advance technology properly. To clarify, professional teachers trained by expert trainer would be able to deal with high-level devices, such as working with video projection instead of common black-board, laptops, telecommunication at the time of crisis, to name but a few, so students will be able to take benefits and learn easily since these devices have been designed in order to modify children’s learning. Nonetheless, mandatory education may have a negative impact on students. Consequently, governments should not squander their money. For example, in the united states, the American government has been allocating balance-budget for amendment education infrastructure for 20 years by adding computers, microphones, etc. Students were quickly becoming getting to know these devices when they were added. As a result, not only having many students abandoned schools came back but also others find it easier than traditional courses which were boring; thus, the more occupational teachers, the more high-educated students.
The second important factor is that trainers at classes which would hold for general teachers would educate them on how to behave well toward their apprentice and identify innovative students. In this view, expertise teachers, taking courses aided by regimen, will be able to separate students according to their academic ability. Therefore, grouping by ability will help teachers to recognize students’ potential and improve it. However, hiring mundane teachers without spending expertise training classes would be impractical since they cannot distinguish a student’s potential. For instance, the Japanese Government has spent so much money to improve their students’ education by training educators since 2001. They observed that professional teachers have been able to divide children by high and low-level groups so that high-level students learned faster, and low-level students could benefit from a slower pace.
To sum up, the government should support schools with money to improve student’s knowledge. I believe that progressing students’ education should be supported by government funding. This is because training teachers can improve student’s abilities due to working with the high-tech system in and because they can recognize the student’s ability.
Comments
I am willing to know how…
I am willing to know how many days take human graders to make a mark.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, look, may, nonetheless, second, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, i feel, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2392.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.76385542169 4.8611393121 119% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00237869601 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566265060241 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 718.2 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.8680142449 48.9658058833 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.6 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.25 5.45110844103 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203222222643 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0702888811519 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042622898175 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136886267937 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0340574223747 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.13 10.9000537634 148% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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