A recent study by the Center for Disease Control and Prevention found that employees with paid sick leave are 28 percent less likely to be involved in a work-related accident than employees who do not receive payment for sick leave. Researchers hypothesize that employees with unpaid sick leave feel pressured to work during time of illness for fear of lack of pay. On-the-job accidents are then spurred by impaired judgment or motor skills due to illness or illness-related medications. The highest-risk occupations, such as construction, showed the highest discrepancy between paid and unpaid leave.
The statement proposes that employees with paid sick leave are less likely to be involved ina work related accident that employees who do not recieve sick leave. However the hypothesis is contignent upon several questions that must be answered to evaluate the the vailidity of the argument.
Firstly, according to the study performed by the Center for Disease Control and Prevention employes with sick leave than the one without are 28% less likely to be involved in work related accident. However, this statistic doesnly reflect on what section of the working sector is considered for the study. The employees working in the production or maintanence department are more prone to work related accidents than the white collar jobs. Therefore, a detailed description on the section of employes involved in the the censure should be apended to the report.
In furtherance, the thesis doesn't mention on what basis are sick leaves provided in some organisation. There's a need to explain if sick leaves can be taken easily, as that will permit the lethargic employee to take advantage. And they cannot be included in the statistics. A precise defination of sickness here would increase the credibility of the thesis
Finally, the work related accidents are not necessarily a result of illness. The impaired skills might be because the employee isn't goot at that particular skill. There is a possibility that the employee is a dormant. So work related accident cannot be the only basis to obtain a clear juxtaposition between the paid sick leave employees and the others. Authors can improve their hypothesis by inculcating decision making skills as one of the attributes.
In conclusion, the prediction based on work related accidents assumptions given is rife with unwarranted prepositions. Also, open to the questions raised above that must be answered satisfactorily to prove the plausibility of such presentments.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 12 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 19 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 308 350
No. of Characters: 1579 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.189 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.127 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.851 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.118 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.009 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.529 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.293 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.551 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.023 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 163, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...mployees who do not recieve sick leave. However the hypothesis is contignent upon sever...
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Line 1, column 257, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...tions that must be answered to evaluate the the vailidity of the argument. Firstly, ...
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Line 1, column 257, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...tions that must be answered to evaluate the the vailidity of the argument. Firstly, ...
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Line 3, column 309, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... sector is considered for the study. The employees working in the production or m...
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Line 3, column 515, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
... on the section of employes involved in the the censure should be apended to the report...
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Line 3, column 515, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
... on the section of employes involved in the the censure should be apended to the report...
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Line 5, column 28, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...e report. In furtherance, the thesis doesnt mention on what basis are sick leaves p...
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Line 5, column 104, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: There's
...k leaves provided in some organisation. Theres a need to explain if sick leaves can be...
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Line 7, column 128, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...ed skills might be because the employee isnt goot at that particular skill. There is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, so, therefore, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 28.8173652695 35% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1621.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 306.0 441.139720559 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29738562092 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9191641785 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542483660131 0.468620217663 116% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.9678386405 57.8364921388 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.3125 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.125 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8125 5.70786347227 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.501766221032 0.218282227539 230% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143272134704 0.0743258471296 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.147126070399 0.0701772020484 210% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258147466494 0.128457276422 201% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121734198053 0.0628817314937 194% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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