Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social networking sites Other people prefer not to create such records Which approach do you prefer and why Use specific reasons and examples to supp

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Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records.Which approach do you prefer, and why?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Today, people use social media more than in the past, this is because they have access to the Internet anywhere and anytime. Due to social medias' features, people are able to upload their pictures and write their experiences. Although, some people are not interested in sharing their pictures, others prefer to do that. I, personally, prefer to share my experiences and pictures. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explain in the following paragraphs.

First of all, we can keep our memories, by recording them on our social media. In the past, people wrote their experiences on paper and printed their photos, but they did rarely because they did not have access to printers and paper all the time and in all places. ​These days, people are able to write their experiences and save their pictures on social networking sites and keep their memories for a long time. For example, today, people use Instagram, so they can upload their pictures and write about them. Subsequently, they can read their notes and see their pictures, which are memorable, moreover by checking them, they can remember all enjoyable senses and feel good.

Secondly, people can share their experiences, which can be helpful to others. People have different experiences, and they can use each others' experiences. This is very beneficial, as it can prevent wasting their time, and help them to decide in their personal life successfully. For instance, during my education in the university, I was an exchange student for two semesters in another university. I decided to write about my experiences and share my photos on my Instagram. This is not only specific memory of my education but also helping others. Some students in my university could apply to another university as exchange students. Consequently, I could help other students to be exchange students, therefore I believe that sharing my experience was beneficial for others, who were interested in being an exchange student.

In conclusion, I prefer to share my experiences by uploading pictures. Since, by sharing my experiences and pictures, I can save my memories durable, which are valuable to me. In addition, other people can use my experiences, and I can use their experiences, so we can help each other in our decisions, indirectly.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 168, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'rarely' is usually put before the verb 'did'.
Suggestion: rarely did
...aper and printed their photos, but they did rarely because they did not have access to pri...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1923.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07387862797 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81783077662 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459102902375 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 610.2 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4260874009 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5714285714 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0476190476 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258563053503 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0952689188774 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0722765637355 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184252291169 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0657704020082 0.0645574589148 102% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.83 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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