TPO 62
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? After completing high school, students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The period after high school is critical, as young people enter a new phase of their lives, full of responsibilities and big decisions. The first and most significant decision they face is what the next step is? What do they choose as their major? What do they want for their lives? Some people believe it is best to take a year off to work or to travel before studying at a university, and I am one big supporter of this opinion for reasons I will discuss shortly.
Students need to figure out what they really want before choosing their majors. Ten years ago, after finishing high school, I had this big dream of becoming a pharmacist just like my parents were. Luckily, my uncle, who lived in the States at that time, invited me to visit him for the summer break. When I did, that was the turning point of my life. I stayed there for three months at first, and my uncle helped me get a job as a pharmacy technician in their local pharmacy. During this time, I realized that being a pharmacist was never actually a good fit for me. It was just a childish fantasy of following my parents' lead, so I went back home and majored in art. Now I have my own gallery, which I not only make a good living from, but I also really enjoy. If I did not travel after school and had my first work experience, I would never know what I actually want and would pick the wrong path for my life.
Another reason I strongly recommend taking some time to travel before university is to help students feel more relaxed to start the next important chapter of their lives. Take my brother as an example; he suffered from anxiety and severe burnout after high school. He was studying almost 24/7 and had no time to take care of himself at all. He took a year off and traveled around the world before he started his dentistry School. He always talked about how this year saved his sanity. Once, he told me that he would have never made it through dentistry school without that one year off. He said the pressure of the competition and studying was too much, but he was mentally ready for that because of the relaxing year he spent traveling the world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 431, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...before he started his dentistry School. He always talked about how this year saved...
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Line 5, column 486, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Once” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d about how this year saved his sanity. Once, he told me that he would have never ma...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, really, so, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1745.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.39546599496 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29495224996 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549118387909 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7756986007 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0952380952 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9047619048 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 5.45110844103 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216368871853 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0666029450181 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514374892126 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155978596483 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047199114548 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.24 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.