For the successful development of a country it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children five to ten years old than to spend money on universities Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In today's progressive and sophisticated world where we live, no one can turn a blind eye to the significance of education. When it comes to whether the five to ten years old children desire more budget for their education or adults, there are different ideas. While some people are inclined toward the opinion that government should allocate a huge sum of money to kid's education, others hold just the opposite idea and consider adult education more important to become a prosperous society. Personally speaking, I firmly believe that the first group carries more weight. In the following paragraphs, I will cogently explain my reason to justify my viewpoint.
First of all, the better the children are educated, the brighter the society will be. To clarify, intelligence is more flexible during childhood, and we can easily boost children's cognitive abilities by engaging them with extra tasks, but there is no such flexibility for the adult. According to psychologists, IQ has become stable after age 10, and the time before this age is a golden time to increase the average intelligence of kids. This is achievable just by enhancing the level of education they receive. For instance, the Japanese are one of the most innovative people globally, and they export advanced industrial equipment to over the world. They are creative and invent so many things every day, which economically is a breakthrough for the government of Japan. Because, in the past, they allocated a significant amount of budget for kids to learn a different variety of learning material. Therefore, the more money is invested in kids' education, the more innovative teenagers will go to universities soon and the more profit the government can gain.

Secondly, for some purposes, university-age could be so late. To put it in a vivid picture, think about mental health prevention programs. Prevention is always cheaper and more effective than the cure is. Children are innocent and vulnerable to some diseases, environmentally or physically. And if a government cares about the health of the society, it should spend more money to recognize the kids who are vulnerable to some behavioral problems and allocate a budget to prevention programs, which their target group are these vulnerable children. Without such programs in one country, crime would increase, and teenagers even did not get the university. Moreover, prevention is always is cheaper than cure. Teenagers who commit crimes or suffer from inefficient behavior are probably trouble makers and costly to society. For illustration, just imagine a society with healthy, assertive, educated, and innovative members and compare it with an opposite one, a community that's members, suffer deep health uncured problems. Let alone society, they couldn't help themselves. Therefore, It is very cost-effective to invest money for kids and provide some programs to prevent their prospective mental health disorders.
For all the reasons mentioned above, I consider the education of children more important than the adults.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2568.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 484.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30578512397 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92561107997 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 833.4 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9723781207 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.72 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.36 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.68 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262000712523 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0640031808825 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0672878556648 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182446081686 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0450453198819 0.0645574589148 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 86.8835125448 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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