Most homes in the northeastern United States where winters are typically cold have traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating Last heating season that region experienced 90 days with below normal temperatures and climate forecasters predict th

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"Most homes in the northeastern United States, where winters are typically cold, have traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating. Last heating season that region experienced 90 days with below-normal temperatures, and climate forecasters predict that this weather pattern will continue for several more years. Furthermore, many new homes are being built in the region in response to recent population growth. Because of these trends, we predict an increased demand for heating oil and recommend investment in Consolidated Industries, one of whose major business operations is the retail sale of home heating oil."

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

On glancing through the argument at first, the statement made by the author seems convincing. But on closely looking into it, it is found that the argument is rife with holes and assumptions.

Firstly, it is mentioned in the passage that over the last year there were about twenty days in which this region experienced below-average temperatures. This statement is very narrow. We do not have any idea about what was the actual temperature of the region. For example, if the average temperature of the region is around 10 degrees and furthermore it falls below this temperature to say 5 degrees. This is not a drastic change. Thus, this in no ways suggests that there will be a demand for more oil.

Apart from this, many new homes have been built in this region. Again, just because more people are moving in, it does not necessarily mean that there will be a rise in the demand for oil for heating purposes. These people moving in may have stayed in regions even more colder than this. For them, the temperature of the Northeastern US may not be severe. They may be also enjoying it.

Moreover, we cannot predict that there will be a rise in the demand for the heating oil in the future. It may happen that in the coming future, the ways of heating may change. Advancements in technologies may give way to various innovations such as electric heaters, etc. And if all the public shifts to using these electric heaters then the demand for heating oil will fall down drastically.

It has also been said that investment in Consolidated industries is profitable for the future as its major business is the sale of heating oil. But we cannot simply invest based on this one point. We also need to understand the company's future aspects regarding the oil sale. What if the company decides to reduce this particular business operation and instead focus on some other operation. This will not be a good scenario for those who have invested solely on the basis that the company's major business is heating oil sale.

Thus, before making any decisions, the author must consider all of the above mentioned points and assumptions. Only the will the author be able to come to a good conclusion.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 266, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'colder' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: colder
...ving in may have stayed in regions even more colder than this. For them, the temperature of...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 61, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...any decisions, the author must consider all of the above mentioned points and assumptions....
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, may, moreover, regarding, so, then, thus, apart from, for example, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1815.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 383.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73890339426 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57138404319 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522193211488 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 4.96107784431 282% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.5573180088 57.8364921388 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.625 119.503703932 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9583333333 23.324526521 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.70786347227 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.67664670659 278% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203135876651 0.218282227539 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563570968424 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526557846646 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0913535470026 0.128457276422 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0594956176425 0.0628817314937 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 14.3799401198 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.3550499002 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.197005988 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.5979740519 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 383 350
No. of Characters: 1760 1500
No. of Different Words: 195 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.424 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.595 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.5 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 116 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 75 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.652 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.239 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.739 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.267 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.532 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.11 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5