Imagine that you are a student at a university where there are long breaks between semesters. The university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break.
- Students must take a course which has no direct connection to their major (for example, students majoring in engineering take a course in fine arts or social sciences)
- Students must volunteer to work on a project in their university’s city or hometown to improve some aspect of life in the city or hometown. For example, a student can work with primary school children who need help with their homework.
Which one do you prefer? Present reasons and examples to support your answer.
Although many believe take a cource which is irrelevent to students major is beneficial for them, I on the other hand beleive volunteer work in the cities is more beneficial for them. I will address the most discernible reasons why I feel this way below.
To begin with, in my country university students just learn theoritical khowledge. Thus, if they work volunteery in the city, it helps them put their khnowledge in to the practice. My own experience is a compelling example of this. I studied mechanical engeneering when I was student. Some of my friends had part time job, but unfortunately, I did not have apportunity to have part time job when I was student and I saw how they did well in the universirty and got high grade. One day of of my professor adviced me work in his company as a volunteer. I accepted that and it was one of my best decsion, because in his car making company I have to used what I studied knowledge such as areodynamics, material structure and so on. The result was amazing, in the class I learnd more effciently, in order to I used and saw how this knowledge work in real work. Accordingly, I believe if student work on a project in the city they are more succesful in the university.
Moreover, university student has fresh mind and unique idea, which means taht they will help to improve the city. Many cities in my country faces many challenging situation, becaue the lake of enough money. Therefore, volunteer students could help to improve or even bulid cities failities and infrastructre. For instance. In my country stdents should do some vulenteer projects, in order to graduate. Every year students come to my city, Isfahan. My city has a beutifull river in it’s center, but unfortunately becaue of years of drought it is drieand off. But one volunteer student great idea solved that problem. However, at the begging that idea seemed imposible but after more reaserch the authorities implement that and solve our city problem. It illustrate that how volunteer students are able to improve cities.
In conclusion, it is for all aforementioned reasons, I firmly beleive volunteer work in the unversity’s city is beter for students because they use what they learn in the class and will learn better they theoritical curces, and because they can help to cities bad conditions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1936.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87469998435 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5175 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.7461270044 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.1904761905 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0476190476 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95238095238 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177862037647 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0599659120818 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0516142909377 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108623645304 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0332232177954 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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