1. The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.
"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author according to some reasons advises that for achieving success in business, the firm should hire the employees with sleep need under the six hours. However, this recommendation cannot be accepted as it is in that it rests on a number of premises all of which can be challenged in one way or another.
The first problem with the argument is that the writer assumes that according to solo one conducted study the main reason for success in the advertisement agency is correlated to the duration of its executors’ sleep hours. Actually, this conclusion is shaky since there is no information about the study. This success can depend on various factors such as the presented services, clients, type of advertisement, and so on. As long as the writer does not explain the examination process explicitly linking the success to the duration of sleep hours is not acceptable.
The second problem with the issue is that the author mentions to different studied firms which depict the identical result as rearing clue for the assumption of sleep need fewer than six hours warrants the profit. This assumption also cannot be accepted since there is no data about the number considered people in the case studies, it is lucidly obvious the higher the number of applicants, the more reliable and valid is the result. Since there is no data about this number, this assumption is not reliable and accurate. In addition, even the scope of considered people at the studies is considered as high to make the studies acceptable there is another issue with the hypothesis and that is the difficulties and barriers of generalization of this finding to the whole firm. Since the feasible way of generalization and extending of a finding is the similarity of case study with the main population in whole aspects such as the gender, age, and physical ability; the generalized idea will not be effective as long as the studies firms are identical to the main population.
Finally, the conclusion is also skeptical since the term of prosper is a vague term which requires further explanation. The problem with this ambiguous word is which perspective of success is considered by the author. By consideration of the validity of two above-mentioned reasons, maybe the success achieved by these studied firms is based on the financial profit; on the other hand, a firm is willing to feat a prosper in an international reputation. In this scenario, the sleep duration parameter will not be effective for this firm as it did for studies agencies. Furthermore, the writer generalized the conclusion from the study about the advertisement agencies to other types of firms which is acceptable; because there is a variation between the affairs. Some tasks require more concentration; therefore, good and long sleep at night can be beneficial for these employees. Consequently, the success of some advertainments firms cannot guarantee the entire firm’s success.
To wrap it up, all the aforementioned facts illustrate that the author’s advice will be acceptable if he considers main reason of success in Mentian advertising executives, and there will be comprehensive information about the studies firms and their similarity with the main population. Furthermore, there should be an exact explanation for the term of prosper.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 541 350
No. of Characters: 2708 1500
No. of Different Words: 220 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.823 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.006 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.893 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 185 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 153 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 102 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 76 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.05 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.673 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.307 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.519 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.072 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 429, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ents, type of advertisement, and so on. As long as the writer does not explain the...
^^
Line 4, column 412, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...e other hand, a firm is willing to feat a prosper in an international reputation. In this...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, in addition, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.6327345309 173% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 55.5748502994 133% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 16.3942115768 159% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2780.0 2260.96107784 123% => OK
No of words: 541.0 441.139720559 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13863216266 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82280071112 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03497492679 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.428835489834 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 876.6 705.55239521 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.4863116016 57.8364921388 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.0 119.503703932 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.05 23.324526521 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95 5.70786347227 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0983573529921 0.218282227539 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0345762408337 0.0743258471296 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.023846601947 0.0701772020484 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.062274929906 0.128457276422 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00889564179976 0.0628817314937 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 98.500998004 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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