An ancient, traditional remedy for insomnia—the scent of lavender flowers—has now been proved effective. In a recent study, 30 volunteers with chronic insomnia slept each night for three weeks on lavender-scented pillows in a controlled room where their sleep was monitored electronically. During the first week, volunteers continued to take their usual sleeping medication. They slept soundly but wakened feeling tired. At the beginning of the second week, the volunteers discontinued their sleeping medication. During that week, they slept less soundly than the previous week and felt even more tired. During the third week, the volunteers slept longer and more soundly than in the previous two weeks. Therefore, the study proves that lavender cures insomnia within a short period of time.
In this arguement, the author has drawn an optimistic conclusion that lavender cures insomnia within a short period of time. To support this conclusion the author experimented with the 30 volunteers having chronic insomnia and asseerted that they slept of three weeks. However, the arguement fails to account for several other possible explanations. So this arguement is unconvincing for several reasons.
First of all, the arguement is considering only 30 volunteers for their experiment. If this study works for these 30 volunteers, does that mean it will work for all the people residing in all other region? No. The author also does not have provided the details of these 30 volunteers, wheather this volunteer is male or female, it depends on their sleeping process and daily routine. Moreover it also does not provide the data taht what was the backgroung of the volunteer. Maybe these volunteers were bribed for success of the study. In addition, these volunteer were made to sleep on lavender scented pillow, it does not take into account that if this worked for 30 volunteers it will work for all other people and what about those who are allergic to lavenderic scent?
Secondly, it does not provide data of work load of the volunteers. Maybe they are too busy in their hectic schedule and due to work load and pressure from their bosses and tension they were not able to sleep in previous few weeks. So by volunteering in this study, they get rest and were free from all the tension so they could sleep peacefully during these weeks. In first week they woke up feeling tired because they are not used to it. Also the atmosphere matters in soporific nature of human. Maybe they could not sleep due to nosiy environment outside, honks to vehicles and all other disturbing noises, but he location where this study is carried out is isolated for the city where there is no noise and disturbance and because of this thay could sleep for more time than at home.
Thirdly, it is said that they could sleep less soundly during last weeks due to this pillow, but their maybe some other reasons. If they are isolated, they have nothing to do so person becomes lazy and automatically sleep induces without andy medications.
Thus, considering all above points the arguement is unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen this arguement the author needs to provide more data on volunteers and other statistical data considering all the above points. Due to limitness of volunteers this arguement is not justified.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: In this arguement, the author has drawn an optimistic conclusion that lavender cures insomnia within a short period of time.
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
Sentence: To support this conclusion the author experimented with the 30 volunteers having chronic insomnia and asseerted that they slept of three weeks.
Error: asseerted Suggestion: asserted
Sentence: However, the arguement fails to account for several other possible explanations.
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
Sentence: So this arguement is unconvincing for several reasons.
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
Sentence: First of all, the arguement is considering only 30 volunteers for their experiment.
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
Sentence: No. The author also does not have provided the details of these 30 volunteers, wheather this volunteer is male or female, it depends on their sleeping process and daily routine.
Error: wheather Suggestion: whether
Sentence: Moreover it also does not provide the data taht what was the backgroung of the volunteer.
Error: taht Suggestion: tact
Error: backgroung Suggestion: background
Sentence: Maybe they could not sleep due to nosiy environment outside, honks to vehicles and all other disturbing noises, but he location where this study is carried out is isolated for the city where there is no noise and disturbance and because of this thay could sleep for more time than at home.
Error: nosiy Suggestion: noisy
Error: thay Suggestion: than
Sentence: If they are isolated, they have nothing to do so person becomes lazy and automatically sleep induces without andy medications.
Error: andy Suggestion: any
Sentence: Thus, considering all above points the arguement is unconvincing as it stands.
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
Sentence: To strengthen this arguement the author needs to provide more data on volunteers and other statistical data considering all the above points.
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
Sentence: Due to limitness of volunteers this arguement is not justified.
Error: limitness Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
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argument 1 -- OK, but it is wrong to say: 'Maybe these volunteers were bribed for success of the study.'
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not OK. we may argue like: it may not work after 3 weeks.
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flaws:
No. of Spelling Errors: 15 2
Double check spelling errors.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 15 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 425 350
No. of Characters: 2043 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.54 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.807 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.5 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.238 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.984 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.309 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.53 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 81, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cures'' or 'cure's'?
Suggestion: cures'; cure's
... an optimistic conclusion that lavender cures insomnia within a short period of time....
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Line 1, column 111, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... lavender cures insomnia within a short period of time. To support this conclusion the author ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 387, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...eir sleeping process and daily routine. Moreover it also does not provide the data taht ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 442, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... tired because they are not used to it. Also the atmosphere matters in soporific nat...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, thus, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 28.8173652695 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2105.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 425.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95294117647 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58239983878 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477647058824 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.4828049241 57.8364921388 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.238095238 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2380952381 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7619047619 5.70786347227 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176568637601 0.218282227539 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0593308436484 0.0743258471296 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628899213248 0.0701772020484 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0979459657061 0.128457276422 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0786746509514 0.0628817314937 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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