On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals
In the above argument the writer wants to convey the message to the editor that by decreasing the number of mopeds on the Balmar’s island will decrease the number of accidents between the pedestrians and the vehicles. Also it claims that this process was carried out in different city and results were seen. But, without the total number of accidents and relation between both the cities are not given.
Firstly, the main point is given that there is increase in number of population in summer is increased. Does that mean that accidents will increase? Suppose if accidents increases that does not mean that there is only accident between moped and pedestrian, there could be any other accident also.
Secondly, it also claims that by reducing the number of vehicles from 50 per day to 25 per day will decrease the accidents between mopeds and pedestrian, but there is no proof that number of accidents will surely decrease. Maybe only one bad driver can cause number of accidents and the daily percentage will increase. Until and unless number of accidents happening per day is not stated this could not be claim.
Finally, there is wrong comparison between the two cities. The same process of decreasing the number of mopeds by half in the neighboring island seaville has decrease the number of accidents by 50%. But, does that goes with the other city as well? Maybe the tourist visiting that city was less and so many accidents do not occur. Also depending on how the streets are wide there is place for driving. Moreover travelling distance is not stated too so maybe in the seaville island people prefer walking more than driving and due to this the number of accidents are less.
Thus, by above points stated it cannot be claimed that by decreasing the number of mopeds from 50 per day to 25 per day will result in decrease the number of accidents. There should be more information provided on the number of accidents happening in time in summer.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK. Look: To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians,
argument 2 -- not OK. we may say: maybe other reasons have cased the 50 percent annual reduction.
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 338 350
No. of Characters: 1586 1500
No. of Different Words: 146 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.288 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.692 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.347 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 116 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.882 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.228 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.389 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.583 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.095 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 224, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...tween the pedestrians and the vehicles. Also it claims that this process was carried...
^^^^
Line 3, column 292, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...rian, there could be any other accident also. Secondly, it also claims that by re...
^^^^
Line 5, column 320, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Until” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...and the daily percentage will increase. Until and unless number of accidents happenin...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 215, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'go'?
Suggestion: go
...ber of accidents by 50%. But, does that goes with the other city as well? Maybe the ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 331, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ess and so many accidents do not occur. Also depending on how the streets are wide t...
^^^^
Line 7, column 402, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...ts are wide there is place for driving. Moreover travelling distance is not stated too s...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1635.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 338.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83727810651 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44055583918 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.449704142012 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.4283467393 57.8364921388 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1764705882 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8823529412 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11764705882 5.70786347227 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203823012441 0.218282227539 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0756230288833 0.0743258471296 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569920241535 0.0701772020484 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134471626067 0.128457276422 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0257079930992 0.0628817314937 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 98.500998004 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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