Butter has now been replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants throughout the southwestern United States. Only about 2 percent of customers have complained, indicating that 98 people out of 100 are happy with the change. Furthermore, many servers have reported that a number of customers who ask for butter do not complain when they are given margarine instead. Clearly, either these customers cannot distinguish butter from margarine or they use the term 'butter' to refer to either butter or margarine. Thus, to avoid the expense of purchasing butter and to increase profitability, the Happy Pancake House should extend this cost-saving change to its restaurants in the southeast and northeast as well
The manager of the happy pancake house restaurant has drawn an optimistic conclusion that by using the margarine instead of butter, the people do not have objection, also their profit will increase. To support this conclusion the manager has derived many points but fails to consider some points which might affect the conclusion. So on this basis the argument do not stand.
Firstly, the manager states that only 2 percent people have complained about this. This cannot be considered because the number of people dining their is not giver. So If there are only few people coming to that restaurant then this 2 percent becomes very big. Also the it states that 98 percent people do not complain if they are served margarine, the author has made wrong comparison, what if they people did not know the difference between margarine and butter? What if they don't care about what they are served? Does that mean that all the people around that cities will don't care.
Secondly, the statement concluded by the servers in restaurant that many people do not object that they are served margarine instead of butter. This is because there is same color and minute difference in taste between them. Maybe they did not object right now but they can be show their objection by not coming in that restaurant again. Then will it be profitable? They will share this things to other people and they too will not prefer this restaurant and go elsewhere instead.
Thirdly, If the customers could tell the difference between butter and margarine then also they don't want to tell them because they don't want to be in dispute with managers.
Fourthly, the manager claims that by using totally margarine instead of butter can reduce their expences, also by applying it in southeast branch and northeast branch and it would be profitable. Here the manager has made wrong comparison. If something occurs in one city that does not mean it will be same impact on other city as well. The people in other city might be smart and can identify the difference between them and so it would be not profitable anymore.
Thus by above reasons, this argument undermines and do not stand. To strengthen this argument the manager needs to provide the statistical data to the people that they are satisfied. Also, manager should take feedback from the people so that they can estimate rightly.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Fourthly, the manager claims that by using totally margarine instead of butter can reduce their expences, also by applying it in southeast branch and northeast branch and it would be profitable.
Error: expences Suggestion: expenses
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- too short and not really
argument 4 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 407 350
No. of Characters: 1913 1500
No. of Different Words: 173 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.492 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.7 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.315 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.201 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.301 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.543 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.095 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...his basis the argument do not stand. Firstly, the manager states that only 2 ...
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Line 3, column 158, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...red because the number of people dining their is not giver. So If there are only few ...
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Line 3, column 178, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...er of people dining their is not giver. So If there are only few people coming to tha...
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Line 3, column 274, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...t then this 2 percent becomes very big. Also the it states that 98 percent people do...
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Line 3, column 279, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'it'?
Suggestion: the; it
...n this 2 percent becomes very big. Also the it states that 98 percent people do not co...
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Line 3, column 491, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ween margarine and butter? What if they dont care about what they are served? Does t...
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Line 3, column 588, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... all the people around that cities will dont care. Secondly, the sta...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e around that cities will dont care. Secondly, the statement concluded by the...
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Line 5, column 396, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... will it be profitable? They will share this things to other people and they too wil...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...restaurant and go elsewhere instead. Thirdly, If the customers could tell the...
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Line 7, column 110, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...een butter and margarine then also they dont want to tell them because they dont wan...
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Line 7, column 146, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...hey dont want to tell them because they dont want to be in dispute with managers. ...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...want to be in dispute with managers. Fourthly, the manager claims that by usi...
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Line 9, column 254, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... the manager has made wrong comparison. If something occurs in one city that does ...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... it would be not profitable anymore. Thus by above reasons, this argument und...
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Line 11, column 15, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ot profitable anymore. Thus by above reasons, this argument undermi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, thus, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 28.8173652695 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1966.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 403.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87841191067 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38126793603 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.439205955335 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 598.5 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.2918137367 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.3636363636 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3181818182 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09090909091 5.70786347227 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.25449101796 305% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157211233879 0.218282227539 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0510396849458 0.0743258471296 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585230708239 0.0701772020484 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0858578492966 0.128457276422 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0505492553565 0.0628817314937 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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