In an attempt to improve highway safety, Prunty County last year lowered its speed limit from 55 to 45 miles per hour on all county highways. But this effort has failed: the number of accidents has not decreased, and, based on reports by the highway patrol, many drivers are exceeding the speed limit. Prunty County should instead undertake the same kind of road improvement project that Butler County completed five years ago: increasing lane widths, resurfacing rough highways, and improving visibility at dangerous intersections. Today, major Butler County roads still have a 55 mph speed limit, yet there were 25 percent fewer reported accidents in Butler County this past year than there were five years ago.
In the argument the author has said stated that the earlier measures taken by the Prunty county to decrease the number of the accidents happening in the area had been failed. Therefore, the Prunty county should consider the methods opted by Butler County regarding the same issue by widening the lanes, resurfacing rough highways, and improving visibility at dangerous roads. Due to the implementation of these, the number of accidents taking place in the Butler County had successfuly decreased to 75 percent of the injuries that happened five year ago. But the author has not been able to mention that weather the population or weather or geopolitical conditions of the two counties are same or not. There are also other ambivalences in the argument that author has failed to aim at. Henceforth, I am not in the support of the author's conclusion.
Firstly, the author has not mentioned whether Prunty county is able to consider the methods that Butler County has taken. As there is no piece of information regarding the geographical conditions of both of the counties. It might be possible that Butler county is a plain area and they were able to implement some changes in the road. On the other hand, it might be possible that Prunty County is a mountain area where these constructions can not be done properly. Therefore, some information is missing from the author's side.
Moreover, the author has not written anything about why the accidents were happening in both of the counties. It is not necessary that accidents are supposed to happen due to the human mistakes, they can also take place in unwelcomed natural disasters. Author has given no information regarding the weather conditions of the counties. It might be possible that in Prunty County it is always cold and raining and on the other hand, Butler County veterans the sun most of the time of the year.
Additionally, author has also failed to give data about when did the Prunty County implement a road improvement project the last time. It might have happened just before changing the speed limit, or the project had been done years ago. If it had been done recently then the mayor of the county would not like to spend extraneous money for the same project. Henceforth, author should have mentioned this in his argument.
I would like to end my argument by stating that in order to provide better road services to the Prunty County, the author has tried to give out the data, the author even tried to do comparison between the two counties and their management system regarding improving the accidents but at certain points the author has failed to enlighten his argument successfully.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 451 350
No. of Characters: 2167 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.608 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.805 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.58 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.55 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.338 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.363 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.543 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.086 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 703, Rule ID: ALSO_OTHER[1]
Message: Use simply 'there are other' or 'there are also'
Suggestion: There are other; There are also
...ns of the two counties are same or not. There are also other ambivalences in the argument that autho...
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Line 1, column 830, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ceforth, I am not in the support of the authors conclusion. Firstly, the author has ...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 123, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e methods that Butler County has taken. As there is no piece of information regard...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, then, therefore, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2217.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 451.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91574279379 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64262114053 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.434589800443 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 690.3 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.5457092417 57.8364921388 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.85 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.55 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176941469777 0.218282227539 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0599053126739 0.0743258471296 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453949657086 0.0701772020484 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109866943048 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323294041938 0.0628817314937 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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