On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals
The author concludes that, the number of accidents on the Balmer island will reduce if the number of mopeds which are rented by the people are reduced to 25 vehicles per day from the current number of 50. The author uses the data from last year, where neighbouring Seaville island implemented this and the accidents were reduced. However, author makes several assumptions which need to be addressed before coming to a decision.
Firstly, the author mentions that, the moped is popular form of transport on the Balmer island but in no way the author state whether moped is the only form of transport. For one, it may be that the people who visit Balmer island during summers bring their own vehicles and use that vehicle for roaming around the island. If this is considered as a possibility, then even if the number of mopeds rented are reduced then also the number of accidents will not reduce.
Furthermore, the author does not mention the percent of accidents which take place due to increase in number of mopeds it is a possibility that the number of incidents involving mopeds and pedestrians take place due to other reasons such as breaking rules by the driver or pedestrian walking without giving attention to nearby surroundings. If this is the case then reducing the number of mopeds will not make any difference in the number of accidents which take place.
Finally, author claims that reducing the number of mopeds will reduce the number of accidents based on the fact that, last year the neighbouring island of Seville implemented this and there was reduction in the number of accidents. However, it is not necessary that the solution which is successfully implemented in Seville will work in Balmer. The author does not mention anything about the cause of accidents which took place at Seville. It might be the case that the number of accidents in Seville are very less as compared to Balmer because their are strict rules on driving mopeds on the island rather than the number of mopeds. Also, it might be the case that Balmer island have more hilly region which makes difficult for the moped driver to drive the vehicle but in such cases just reducing the mopeds will not be the solution which will stop the accidents.
To sum up, reducing the number of accidents on the island is the ultimate goal for town council. But deeper analysis of the cause of accidents should be done before taking any step to reduce the number of mopeds.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 424 350
No. of Characters: 1991 1500
No. of Different Words: 170 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.538 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.696 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.373 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.267 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.138 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.455 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.634 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.167 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 342, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...iving attention to nearby surroundings. If this is the case then reducing the numb...
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Line 7, column 516, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...r of accidents in Seville are very less as compared to Balmer because their are st...
^^
Line 7, column 546, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...very less as compared to Balmer because their are strict rules on driving mopeds on t...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2039.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 424.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80896226415 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43352229276 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.415094339623 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 638.1 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.8350126368 57.8364921388 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.933333333 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2666666667 23.324526521 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364819880816 0.218282227539 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14272827677 0.0743258471296 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731084460768 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230858549239 0.128457276422 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508445331965 0.0628817314937 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.3799401198 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.3550499002 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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