Claim: In any field — business, politics, education, government — those in power should step down after five years.Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.

Essay topics:

Claim: In any field — business, politics, education, government — those in power should step down after five years.
Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.

The author asserts that, there should be a change in leadership after 5 years in any field like education, government or business, and claims that this is the surest path to success for any enterprise. However, I not completely agree with the authors claim.

Firstly, in most of the cases, the organizations are built on the experience of the people in that field i.e. business, politics, education. According to me, I feel that in order to be leader of an enterprise and to gain all the leadership qualities, 5 years are not enough. As it is said that 'Experience is the best teacher' how will one gain the leadership qualities required to successfully run an organization if he/she has to step down after 5 years.

Secondly, leadership is not just running the day to day activities of the organization but it also includes the relationships with the people, clients, employees who truly have a huge contribution in success of the organization. The trust, relations are not built in short time but require years to mature and develop. For example, if a client approached a company through the manager and manager have a good repo with the client but if the manager steps down after 5 years it is not necessary that the new manager will have same understanding and relationship with the client which may result in losing the client and in turn loss to the company.

Finally, on the contrary, it totally depends on whether the leader is performing or not. If the leader is not giving good results to an organization, it is necessary to replace the leader but if a leader is delivering exceptionally then there is no need to change the leadership. In such cases, changing the leadership can affect the enterprise very badly. For example, in a country, if the government is not keeping up its promises and is not delivering then the government should be thrown out of power and the country needs to be under different leadership.

To sum up, in my opinion, the change in leadership should be based on the effectiveness of the leader to manage the organization. If the leader successfully manages the organization and bring glories to the company then there is no need to change the leader. However, if the leader fails to do the job then he/she should be replaced for a fresh start to an organization.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 142, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
...eld i.e. business, politics, education. According to me, I feel that in order to be leader of a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, as to, for example, i feel, in short, in my opinion, on the contrary, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1911.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 400.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7775 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93273656335 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 215.323595506 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4525 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 592.2 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.5408556183 60.3974514979 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.4 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6666666667 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7333333333 5.21951772744 206% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26967560179 0.243740707755 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0850233814658 0.0831039109588 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103456655111 0.0758088955206 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16179139758 0.150359130593 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116139685265 0.0667264976115 174% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 100.480337079 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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